Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapters 11 (part 3) and 12

[szaleniec1000]

It can be effective to place a chapter break in the middle of the scene ("It wasn't even Voldemort.") but when you do it every time there's something going on it gets very old very fast. Now doing it for the verdict of the hearing, the culmination of a multi-chapter arc, could theoretically have worked. However, we'll soon see that not only didn't

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[sickbritkid2]

We already recycled this canon joke back when Caitlin was retconning Tonks into her backstory in Chapter 4, if you recall.

And it was just as dreadfully forced then as it is now.

[sickbritkid2]

And let's have our goon do it on the day he's got scheduled leave.

Is "scheduled off" an Americanism, by chance? Because Tonks made use of it in the preceding sentence while you used a term that I, myself, would use to describe a long leave of absence, not a single day off from work in the middle of the week.

[szaleniec1000]

He's scheduled off if he's got scheduled leave, whether it's for one day or a longer period.

[sickbritkid2]

Uh-huh.

I guess we make a distinction here in the States, then...

[sickbritkid2]

I'm starting to feel sorry for Bullchip, for all he's a bigoted, unprofessional, pretentious wanker.

As you said before: In this series, the characters are such hideous and disgusting people that you'll start sympathizing with the unlikeliest folks.

It's been heavily implied (intentionally or otherwise) that his own client has been screwing him over, it's clear that all his witnesses are completely useless and he's so obviously incapable of living up to his own reputation.

Well, it's not his fault that Neil wrote him so one-dimensionally villainous that the only thing keeping him from being held in contempt is the judge's own incompetence at maintaining her courtroom, which we're told is something she's really good at. Then again, we were also TOLD that Bullchip is a lawyer on par with the likes of Apollo Justice, Phoenix Wright, and Miles Edgeworth, and yet we've seen him turn in a performance that even Winston Payne would find pathetically mediocre.

Anyway, Tonks tells the court about the raid and Judge Ebony calls a thirty-

[sickbritkid2]

Apart from anything else, it renders all of Harry's efforts to defeat Voldemort pointless if it turns out that the world wasn't worth saving in the first place.

Even great authors can wind up accidentally pulling Darkness-Induced Apathy in their readers. Case in point: GRRM and A Song of Ice and Fire. I still love that book series to death, but GRRM's love of continuing to up the angst factor has made several people just not care about the setting anymore. I still hold out hope on an Earn Your Happy Ending situation. Otherwise, the ending of ASoIaF could wind up creating a "Mass Effect 3 situation" for me.

[sickbritkid2]

We're told about this scene rather than shown it, but given how the author renders Timmy's dialogue it's a probably unintentional act of mercy.

No kidding. The less we have to read about Timmy ogling the Judge's crotch and talking about "pemises" and "ginas", the better.

Especially when reading "toddler dialogue" as Neil interprets it just grates upon my nerves so much...