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szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 2 part 1

Nov 29, 2011 21:49

It's back.

( Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 2 )

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szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 00:25:42 UTC

It's the #1 beach fanservice cliché for sure.

szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 00:26:59 UTC

Re the cello: it was mentioned before (it's why Neville decided to invite her to a classical concert for the Date of Doom) but just came out of nowhere in the context of this scene.

kanelives November 30 2011, 00:11:32 UTC

"I like how inconsistent the Britpicking is, in that it's a flat rather than an apartment but the pavement is still a sidewalk."

Not to mention the fact that a British person would be far more likely to call a flat an apartment than they would be to call a pavement a sidewalk.

szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 02:09:28 UTC

This is true as well. It's a very distinctive Americanism to my eyes: according to Wikipedia it was out of fashion in British usage by the 1930s and pretty much disappeared since.

fly_buggy_fly November 30 2011, 00:12:24 UTC

I completely forogt that Draco was the one who knocked up Sam. For some reason, I thought maybe he was going to ask Ron for permission to marry Ginny or something. Don't ask where that came from...I don't know.

szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 01:53:46 UTC

I don't think it was explicitly stated, just hinted at with all the subtlety the author could muster. Which is more or less the same thing.

fly_buggy_fly November 30 2011, 02:01:12 UTC

Once I understood what was going on, I was like "Oh. Yeah. That." I think I just forgot it because this thing is so effing LONG and pointless.

szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 02:10:14 UTC

The Hogwarts Exposed tetralogy is 75,000 words of story in 750,000 of text.

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sickbritkid2 November 30 2011, 04:01:46 UTC

On which note, I'm not sure we ever learn where in America she's from. If we do, it's buried somewhere in a whole mountain of expospeak and doesn't seem to inform her characterisation in the slightest.

She's too gorram flat for me to make an accurate assertion, but judging by the diction of her sentences and "liberated" lifestyle, I'd say she's from San Francisco...

shyfoxling November 30 2011, 21:55:39 UTC

Please! Don't tar my area of the world with this fic's brush!

sickbritkid2 December 1 2011, 03:49:56 UTC

You're from San Fran?

Tell me, what's the general perception of Texas in your area?

shyfoxling December 1 2011, 04:25:24 UTC

From a bit south of there, but if I named the city you probably wouldn't have heard of it.

Um, not great, to put it briefly. Crazy neo-con land. (I know this is not literally true, but you asked for general perception.) Much as we're perceived as crazy ultra-liberal land.

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sickbritkid2 November 30 2011, 04:04:05 UTC

There's only so much suspense you can build up when we already know who it's going to be.

Time for Buildup!Fail music!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sOUsbtUrXHk

szaleniec1000 November 30 2011, 08:18:37 UTC

That will never not be classic.