Just how many TeniPuri sites have we by now? *lol* So, actually, this one is just TV Tokyo their site for the OVA and this is the official one
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I saw a few, but it wasn't anything major. ehehehe, I am actually from the country England, yet I make more grammar mistakes than that! ^____^; I was pretty impressed with your grammar more than anything.
Well I, for one, am very glad you dug those out and aired them for the world! I can't help admiring anyone who is willing to write something in a language other than their own (btw. what is your first language?)
I could still understand the meaning behind the story despite the grammatical errors. I do not think you are a bad storyteller at all - you clearly have a feel for character and what contributes to a good fic. You have the important parts there and the grammar issues could easily be taken care of by an English-speaking beta-reader, so this in no way counts as bad fic!
Anyway, this is your first attempt, and nobody gets it right first time. You should keep writing, and keep learning from it. If you do write anything more, I would happily talk you through language corrections if you'd like me to.
Oh my, there must be still so many in there. ^^° Every time, I tried to pick grammatical errors out, there are new ones. ~.~ And there are still so many, which I don´t notice at all. Gomen! Really! It has to be very painful to read through so many faults. m^.^m
I´m always very glad about every bit of help. Just, please, feel free to correct me, anytime!!! And thank you for it! ^_^v It´s the only way to learn, isn´t it? Making faults and try to correct them. ^^°
*hugs* And, thank you for your encouragement, too! ^_^v My first language is German. ^^
Nya! I wanted to read these when you posted them, but I kept running out of time! But I had the chance to read now, and I really enjoyed both of them! ^_^ I'm impressed too, by your grammar, especially since I know that English is not your first language, and yeah, I really think you did a wonderful job with these. The mistakes that were there (and there really weren't many at all) didn't take away at all from the story, or the feelings conveyed there. I love your view of the GP and I really thought they were very much in character, and nya! You should write more! I definitely feel like you have the talent for it, and I'm so impressed that you're able to write in another language at all, let alone so well. ^__^
Really? To be honest, I really hadn´t thought to receive positive comments about the stories in the first place. More, that they would get ignored or wander in the category "yet another talentless wannabe-story-teller". But, that one of the best writers out there is really thinking like this, is really flattering and encouraging. Just, in the case that I really should write more, I hope that you won´t regret it afterwards. *lol*
<3 <3 <3 Thank you, really! But, if you might have any critic, please, please feel free to tell me, will you?
Nya, I really appreciate you saying that. ;__; I haven't been writing very long at all, and I still have a hard time even thinking of myself as a writer sometimes. It's more something I want to be seen as, I guess, and something I aspire to, so... I just really appreciate that compliment. ♥
And honestly I really enjoyed these. There's a certain quality to your writing, an honestly and an earnestness that I really feel is missing a lot of the time with fanfiction. And I mean, there some word choice things and grammatical things that I personally would change, being a native speaker, but other than that the ideas flow really well, and I really found it enjoyable to read, and refreshing too, in a way. I agree with ssphilosophy too - you do have a really good feel for the characters, which really is the most important thing. *nodnod* Definitely keep writing! As much as you can! I have a feeling that the more you write, the easier it will be for you to feel comfortable in the language, etc. ^_^
Which words would you replace and were are the grammatical things, you would change? Please, please, tell me, Jamie. ^_^o I really have to work on my vocabulary hard too. There are always so many words, which would be fitting much better or I can´t express the things I want to say at all. Please, I would really appreciate any help from you, if you might have a little time!
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Keep up with the writing, I think you may have a talent for it but you just don't realize. ^_______~
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Awwww, thank you, really!!! m^_^m
Nya, despite all the errors? ^^°°° Gomen!
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I can't help admiring anyone who is willing to write something in a language other than their own (btw. what is your first language?)
I could still understand the meaning behind the story despite the grammatical errors. I do not think you are a bad storyteller at all - you clearly have a feel for character and what contributes to a good fic. You have the important parts there and the grammar issues could easily be taken care of by an English-speaking beta-reader, so this in no way counts as bad fic!
Anyway, this is your first attempt, and nobody gets it right first time. You should keep writing, and keep learning from it. If you do write anything more, I would happily talk you through language corrections if you'd like me to.
ganbatte, ne d^_^b
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Oh my, there must be still so many in there. ^^° Every time, I tried to pick grammatical errors out, there are new ones. ~.~ And there are still so many, which I don´t notice at all. Gomen! Really! It has to be very painful to read through so many faults. m^.^m
I´m always very glad about every bit of help. Just, please, feel free to correct me, anytime!!! And thank you for it! ^_^v It´s the only way to learn, isn´t it? Making faults and try to correct them. ^^°
*hugs* And, thank you for your encouragement, too! ^_^v My first language is German. ^^
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(You realise you may have opened Pandora's Box now, letting me loose with the grammar whip? ^_~)
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Yeeeees, anytime, please!!! ^_~
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*huge hugs* ♥
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Really? To be honest, I really hadn´t thought to receive positive comments about the stories in the first place. More, that they would get ignored or wander in the category "yet another talentless wannabe-story-teller". But, that one of the best writers out there is really thinking like this, is really flattering and encouraging. Just, in the case that I really should write more, I hope that you won´t regret it afterwards. *lol*
<3 <3 <3 Thank you, really! But, if you might have any critic, please, please feel free to tell me, will you?
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And honestly I really enjoyed these. There's a certain quality to your writing, an honestly and an earnestness that I really feel is missing a lot of the time with fanfiction. And I mean, there some word choice things and grammatical things that I personally would change, being a native speaker, but other than that the ideas flow really well, and I really found it enjoyable to read, and refreshing too, in a way. I agree with ssphilosophy too - you do have a really good feel for the characters, which really is the most important thing. *nodnod* Definitely keep writing! As much as you can! I have a feeling that the more you write, the easier it will be for you to feel comfortable in the language, etc. ^_^
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Nya, but, it´s really true! ♥ ^_^
Which words would you replace and were are the grammatical things, you would change? Please, please, tell me, Jamie. ^_^o I really have to work on my vocabulary hard too. There are always so many words, which would be fitting much better or I can´t express the things I want to say at all. Please, I would really appreciate any help from you, if you might have a little time!
Thank you so much!
*hugs*
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