fic: Itachi/Shisui: The mechanics of waking up.

[soleil_et_pluie]

well, it was bound to happen eventually. All the Naruto fic I've been reading banging around in my brain, and a Goddamn lot of Itachi/Shisui, too.

Spawned from ronsard’s comment that Itachi can only see Sasuke as a real person. I think Shisui should be in that category, too, and so this was born. :P
I also like how her Gleeful!Shisui, and all the water

Comments

[ronsard]

EXTREME FLAILAGE IS A GO.

Oooh I like this insight into The Wonderful of Uchiha Itachi. It's definitely not easy to pull off, KUDOS. The part where he used deductive reasoning to figure out that he was going through puberty made me LOL IRL. Of course Shisui is in love with you, bb. Go get 'im.

Yes to moar, smuttier fic :3

[soleil_et_pluie]

Aw, man. Thank you! I wrote this and then immediately read You Shall Go to the Ball and was like LOL I SUCK SO HARD. :< i'm awestruck by your writing. ::whimper::

i think i use too many sayings that are cliches sometimes? YOU CAN TELL ME! and thus there will be improvement.

GAH. >_>;

[ronsard]

She speaks of cliches WHILE READING A HIGH SCHOOL AU ABOUT PEOPLE GOING TO THE PROM. Really, lady, really?

I can't really pick out any phrasings that stand out to me as particularly overused. Um, I default to the most common ways of phrasing things all the time orz

[soleil_et_pluie]

lies, lies and deceit! you always use weird and unexpected phrasings or sentences, and even if the prom concept itself is cliche, you make it your own LOL HAVE MORE PRAISE. XD >_>

also you should totally write the smutty part those damn children in Starbucks interrupted you from! moar itachi/shisui plz :P

[pochibubblytea]

My roommate, caroline_chan mentioned this, so I had to check it out >D

Ita/Shi is my fucking kick lately, thanks to Mai xD;

[soleil_et_pluie]

cool, i know caroline_chan- or rather i met her in the days of my KuroFai obsession! i am so flattered i was rec'd! :D :D :D

My god, it's like crack. Itachi/Shisui is my new, tragic doomed OTP, apparently.
But it's just so good, i can't stop :P

[pochibubblytea]

Right? ;w; Those crazy boys, I mourn for them.

I'm writing Shisui/Sasuke right now. Goin' straight to hell >>;

[soleil_et_pluie]

Yup. Straight to hell. But i will be excited to see your thrice-damned creation, though! xP

nthcoincident has convinced me to draw ItaShi for the greater good of all, so now my sketchbook is filling with drowned boys and kissy-Itachi/Shisui. x_x;
it's weird.

[leahnari]

The Internet ate my first comment. arg

Oh man. This is fluffy and sweet and still absolutely Itachi. I second ronsard on the deductive reasoning because HE SO WOULD. Seriously, I can't think of any other character for whom I could buy that train of thought, but it's exactly right for him. Also his immediate decision to go "I like you do you like me" with the full knowledge it will pole-axe Shisui. Nice characterization ^_^

Itachi sometimes wonders, with a touch of chagrin for his clan, How did someone so obnoxiously carefree and stable ever get born into the Uchiha clan?
The repetition of clan makes this sentence feel a bit awkward. This is my only criticism.

Sasuke is going to have actual friends! and adventures and Itachi will teach him everything he knows.
This whole section feels ominous to me considering what's canonically in store for these poor kids, but it still fits within the story well. And really, I have to admire his hope and optimism here.

It’s a comforting thought, that he is about to completely mess up Shisui’s day

[soleil_et_pluie]

Thanks for your crit and comments! Itachi is hard. I try because I think all Uchiha are secretly awkward and psychologically retarded. :D

thank you for the crit on that sentence! it is awkward, i think i shall change it.
i also love sticking ominous things into happy fics. i need to do less fluff! moar angst. Or something.

I'm glad you enjoyed!! the next part will be done soon, we'll see if i can write smut or not (the answer is probably no.)