lost fic: you knew the hand of the devil - jacob/richard

[angeldylan628]

Title: you knew the hand of the devil
Character(s)/Pairing(s): Jacob/Richard (w/ reference to Ellie/Widmore)
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 3,157
Summary: He knows his weakness. It's always been Richard.
A/N: Written for the sacred_20 prompt, revelation. Also, since Jacob's Enemy doesn't have a name, I just kind of chose one for him.

Disclaimer: I don't own

Comments

[swordznsorcery]

I really enjoyed this. Nice work! One question, though. You mention the crew of the Black Rock, but you gloss over the fact that the hold was full of slaves. I'm not sure how their presence would fit with your version of Richard? Your characterisation of him when he first comes to the island doesn't seem that sort of a man (unless, of course, he's representing those shades of grey that Jacob seems so amused by).

janie_tangerine is right, incidentally, and you've chosen a good name in Zachariah. I've fallen into the habit of thinking of him as Esau, after seeing that name used elsewhere on LJ. Zachariah seems to fit him far better, though. :)

[angeldylan628]

Ah yeah, that's a good point. I think in this case, Richard doesn't necessarily agree with the fact that his ship was part of the slave trade, but he's got a job and he's going to do whatever necessary to fulfill it. I think that's how I justify it for him. He seems capable of doing morally questionable things if they're in line with his goals.

I've seen him called Esau too...and Jacob's Enemy. But Zachariah just sort of popped into my head while I was writing and I stuck with it. I'm glad it worked :D

Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate it :)

[angeldylan628]

lol. I don't see them as gods. I see them as something like fallen angels with lots of time on their hands and nothing to do but play around with peoples lives....and okay I just realize I made them sound like gods anyways. *sigh* Oh well. I agree that they can't be the stereotypical good and evil. It's just too boring that way. I like things better when they're a little bit of both.

Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm glad this portrayal worked for you despite your issues with the premise of Jacob in general. What you said is exactly what I wanted people to get out of it. I'm always amazed how you understand what I'm writing even when I don't think I'm making any sense. So thank you for that. :)

[angeldylan628]

Oh gosh. Thank you so much for the feedback :) I've been wanting to explore the relationship between Jacob and Richard since before Jacob even had a face, but the finale definitely helped kick start my muse.

[jaydblu]

Oh, I really like the way you took this on! It's compelling , and I love Jacob's reasoning on why he did the things he did for Richard. And the last line...awesome and sad.

[angeldylan628]

Thank you so much for the feedback! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[zelda_zee]

This is the fic I was hoping someone would write after the finale! It's just brilliant! I loved where you took these characters. I love your Richard, and what a good job you did with Jacob's POV. The antagonism of his relationship with Zachariah is reminiscent of that brief exchange in the finale, yet takes it so much farther.

GAH! *flails* I can't put into words how much I loved this!

[angeldylan628]

Thank you for the wonderful feedback! :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it!