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save_the_souls

CRIT POST

Apr 27, 2020 13:02

If you have any critique for how I play Allen Walker at Paradisa and how he can be improved, feel free to leave a comment here!

Anonymous commenting is enabled (though I promise I don't hold crit against people) and all comments are screened.

Thank you! &hearts

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anonymous June 2 2011, 02:59:59 UTC

save_the_souls June 2 2011, 03:07:22 UTC

dsfjkdslfdsf THANK YOU SO MUCH ♥ That makes me blush to hear and I'm really having fun threading with your Neah /o/

anonymous September 12 2011, 04:46:51 UTC

1/3 maybe save_the_souls September 14 2011, 00:40:39 UTC

Okay thank you for the crit. I opted out of HMD because my net access is super limited right now, which is the reason why I took a few days to reply to this. Sorry about that!

I'll start with the crit in order here. One correction that I have for you is that while yes, Allen wasn't in a relationship in canon, he was in a relationship with Lenalee for over a year the first time she was here, and for several months the second round she was here. So he does have experience in that field that he didn't have in canon and has a clue of what he's doing. I didn't realize that he seemed "Clingy" or "submissive" in the threads, that wasn't really my intention. I will say that he will have physical displays of affection because yeah- he has those with his friends and if he doesn't have them with a person he's been in a relationship with since December - that would seem even weirder to me. But I'll keep an eye out for being submissive and overdramatic (though if you mean the fact that he lets Arthur get away with stuff a lot- that's gonna ( ... )

Re: 1/3? save_the_souls September 14 2011, 00:42:45 UTC

Allen actually left the PP for more reasons than just the Riful trial- that was just the straw that broke the camel's back. Allen's been with the PP since nearly Day 1- and since Day 1 they have been completely ineffective. He was able to let that go because he knew how hard it could be to get stuff done here. However he had warned people for over a year about Riful and Arthas- and it fell on deaf ears. He approached Lois, a prominent member of the PP, to tell him his suspicions about Riful taking Robin back in...April/May, and he was pretty much dismissed because he didn't have solid proof and treated like a child (to be fair, he was irrational when he spoke to her but it still sucked for him). Even when he did have evidence that Riful did take Robin- the PP didn't do much at all until Arthur was killed. Leroy was taken in by Allen- but no one ever bothered to give a guy a trial and let him rot. To make it even worse, he talked to Yuan about Joshua after it was discovered that Joshua had his horns back - and Yuan pretty much admitted ( ... )

3/3 save_the_souls September 14 2011, 00:42:59 UTC

As for the use of the term murderer, that's partly Allen's immature/naive side showing. He doesn't kill, and he takes it very seriously. Every death is a murder to him. End of story. He thought he killed the Cardinal even though he was 1) horribly feverish/not in the right state of mind and 2) was trying to protect Link who he thought was being killed. Despite that? He still was appalled and horrified that he "murdered" someone even though it was a very justifiable death in more seasoned fighters' eyes ( ... )

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