CRIT POST

[save_the_souls]

If you have any critique for how I play Allen Walker at Paradisa and how he can be improved, feel free to leave a comment here!

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Re: 1/3?

[save_the_souls]

Allen actually left the PP for more reasons than just the Riful trial- that was just the straw that broke the camel's back. Allen's been with the PP since nearly Day 1- and since Day 1 they have been completely ineffective. He was able to let that go because he knew how hard it could be to get stuff done here. However he had warned people for over a year about Riful and Arthas- and it fell on deaf ears. He approached Lois, a prominent member of the PP, to tell him his suspicions about Riful taking Robin back in...April/May, and he was pretty much dismissed because he didn't have solid proof and treated like a child (to be fair, he was irrational when he spoke to her but it still sucked for him). Even when he did have evidence that Riful did take Robin- the PP didn't do much at all until Arthur was killed. Leroy was taken in by Allen- but no one ever bothered to give a guy a trial and let him rot. To make it even worse, he talked to Yuan about Joshua after it was discovered that Joshua had his horns back - and Yuan pretty much admitted that after they removed the horns they did very little to track of where the horns went (which in the end has cost a friend and the only person similar to him in Paradisa's sanity- not cool). All of these things happened and then they started talking about how they needed to do trials for Riful - which Allen being from Earth and well versed in how Paradisa residents forget/forgive people- it was pretty much hearing that they were gonna sacrifice the safety of everyone Allen knows just to look good to everyone in the castle. Which yeah, I realize a lot of this was due to OOC stuff but Allen is reacting to the stuff he experienced ICly.

Which yeah, it did take a lot more stuff for Allen to leave the Black Order but keep in mind that mostly it was because the Order was Allen's home. All his friends were in the Order, his "family", all his life ambitions were tied into the Order and leaving it would severe it all - which would be a hard choice for anyone. The PP? Doesn't have those ties for Allen. If he left, he could still talk to his friends and family, he wouldn't lose his home. He could still follow his dream of saving people and being an Exorcist. Most of the good he's done in Paradisa was away from PP influence anyway. So with all the above reasons plus at his canon point he's already kinda...skeptical of organizations after the Black Order burned him good and stories he hears about the Church of Martel, Claymore's Organization, Camelot, Konoha, etc? He doesn't trust organizations anymore, and he doesn't like the path that the PP is going down. And since he has no real consequential ties to it...leaving it felt like the most IC thing for him to do. He isn't the type to change things from the inside because even when he didn't agree with things in the Order- he kinda just...went with it until he couldn't take it anymore. I hope that makes that whole situation make more sense? To be quite honest, I wish he had stayed in to make my life easier on the OOC front, but ICly it was just making less and less sense that he was gonna put up with it. If the PP ever earns Allen's faith again, he will rejoin. But I'm playing that as I go.

As for his treatment towards the other characters, Allen's temper once again snapped. However his own trigger is people who either hurt people or don't care if people get hurt for their own benefit. Ino pretty much dismissed three people's lives because she wanted to spend time with her boyfriend. On the Leroy front, he is actually very sympathetic towards Leroy since he was a friend/in the same stitch as him and tried to figure out if it was just a demon-related/accident. It wasn't though, Leroy was in a sane state of mind and simply choose to kill people even though he could have easily incapacitate them. Allen is loyal to his friends, but he values people's lives (even those who are douches like Tyki) more. So in the case of Leroy, he's between a rock and a hard place. He definitely wants the best for Leroy, but letting him get away with murder would not be right with him at all. I'm not 100% sure if I treated this right since it's always hard balancing his compassion and his strict morals- but I'll try to be more careful with it in the future.