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Challenge #4: All the way to the beginning (Sanzo/Goku)

Apr 11, 2008 22:42

All the way to the beginning

Prompt #4: Opposites

Author: macavitykitsune

Pairings: 39.

Warnings: Sanzo’s Mouth.

Summary: there’s a voice in Goku’s head this time, and the circle’s closing at last.

A/N: overshot the time limit by fifteen minutes on this one, because the bunnies multiplied halfway through.

There was a voice in his head.

At first, he ( Read more... )

author:macavitykitsune, challenge:opposites, pair:goku/sanzo

Comments 17

eyesofshinigami April 11 2008, 18:27:16 UTC

I don't have a whole lot of time before I have to rush off to class, but....*SQUEES AND TACKLES YOU* This was absolutely lovely. <3 Finally, a Nataku fic where he wakes up and doesn't go ape-shit for someone being around Goku! Hallelujah!

This was artfully done, and absolutely wonderful. I think you incorporated the opposites well into the story. It had so many layers, so many things to look for. ^____^

Not to mention you wrote a 39. *squees* I loved Kanzeon breaking into their bedroom like that. XD Made me giggle.

The voices were perfect and I loved the way you wrote this. Seriously. <3 I could continue fangirling about this, but I think I'll let you alone and just squeal at you in the next email I send you.

^_____________________^ First comment, FTW!

macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 04:14:17 UTC

Yeah. As I said to kubaru_suki, it would make much, much more sense for Nataku to come stay with Goku and Sanzo than it would for him to want to drag Goku back to hell Heaven with him. All he wants is to escape - why would he voluntarily go back? And if Goku regained his memories, this would be the first thing he'd do - march up to Heaven, take off his diadem, go utterly apeshit (pun intended) on them, kill everyone and get Nataku back. At least, that's what I think he'd do. After all, Nataku's death was the beginning of the Goku/ST personality split; it would stand to reason that getting him back would begin healing Seiten Taisei's rage and bring him closer to Goku. It has to happen, or else Gaiden would be meaningless ( ... )

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macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 04:04:07 UTC

Thank you! ^_^ I've always believed that Goku and Nataku are mirrors of each other, and if anyone can get Nataku out of Heaven Goku can. I'm sure KM will resolve that situation before the end of Saiyuki.

Omg, it's so beautiful!~ ginryuu_souhi April 11 2008, 20:00:22 UTC

It was so well-written! I could totally feel the emotions and power sweeping through that room; and as EoS said, one of the very few ones where Nataku doesn't try to kill any/everybody around Goku. *tackles you as well* It was a very lovely piece, and I liked the way the conversations were to the point yet conveyed quite a lot. Also, the comparison between Goku and Nataku was quite brilliantly done. Kids... they're just so pure!~

And of course, Kanzeon can never give up on surprising ( maybe not in that a good way, lol ) the boys, can she? Complete sadist, I agree. &hearts

Thank you for sharing such a wonderful fic! Loved it lots!~ ^_^

Re: Omg, it's so beautiful!~ macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 04:06:33 UTC

It's canon that Nataku at least likes Kenren, and he doesn't seem the jealous type at all to me. It's much more realistic to imagine that he'd want to stay with the ikkou - why drag Goku back to a place they both hate rather than stay with him and be free?

Goku could be a kinky sex freak I think he already is and he'd still be innocent on some level, I truly believe this.

Kanzeon.....*sporfle*

Thank you for the lovely review!

keire_ke April 11 2008, 23:32:59 UTC

We want to see Nataku awake, yes we do. :) I really like this. What with Sanzo's weary acceptance of the new addition to the family and all! Kanzeon was precious, just popping in for a visit, as if she owned the place. :)

macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 04:02:48 UTC

I know, so do I. The kid deserves it more than anyone, I think. At least Goku and the others actually defied Heaven - all Nataku wanted to do was live a little; was that so wrong?

Sanzo has an excellent brat tolerance. Goku, Gojyo, Lirin, Hazel....he should have a TON of practice by now. ^_~

Kanzeon is always a voyeuristic perv fun to write. ^_^

kubaru_suki April 12 2008, 02:29:51 UTC

Nataku smiling at Sanzo like that just broke my heart a little.

macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 04:00:18 UTC

Thank you! And what a lovely icon! ^_^