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In Loco Parentis (Challenge #55, Dialogue Only; Sanzo, Goku; PG)

May 27, 2009 22:15

Title: In Loco Parentis
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: Sanzo's mouth
Pairing(s): n/a, really
Spoilers: Sanzo's history; Sanzo and Goku's first days
Notes: written for saiyuki_time, Challenge #55, a story in dialogue only; time allowed: 40 minutes; time taken: 35 minutes. Go team!
Summary: Goku has a lot of questions.
( 'Aren't you supposed to be asleep, Monkey?' )

challenge: dialogue, char:goku, gen, author:opalmatrix, char:sanzo, rating:pg

Comments 18

geri May 28 2009, 02:32:34 UTC

Aww that was just so special. Sanzo certainly does have away with words when it comes to explaining things to goku

(In Loco Parentis) opalmatrix June 10 2009, 02:08:20 UTC

Thanks! Sanzo's actually pretty good at that kind of thing in general, but he doesn't like to waste it on hopeless cases ... so it's pretty clear that he holds out some hope for Goku!

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lady_ganesh May 30 2009, 00:09:30 UTC

I think a lot of what Sanzo says and does with Goku is a reflection of what happened to him. With a...Sanzo twist. (Don't get too attached to me, damned if I'm going to be mushy, etc.)

(In Loco Parentis) opalmatrix June 10 2009, 02:16:29 UTC

I think you're absolutely correct that Sanzo's own childhood experiences formed a lot of what he does with Goku. For that matter, his experiences with Koumyou are really the only model he's had for affection of any kind, really. (Although I was just re-reading his Burial Arc, and there's a certain level of affection he's getting from Jikaku as well. But that was such a brief relationship ... .)

Re: (In Loco Parentis) lady_ganesh June 10 2009, 02:24:42 UTC

Yeah, I think there were probably a few monks here and there-- Jikaku, Shuuei-- but they were few enough to be remarkable. For the most part it was jealousy and bullshit. Koumyou really was the deciding factor.

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nouvellebrielle May 28 2009, 07:01:07 UTC

Really sweet, with just the right amount of humour to it! Thanks very much for sharing.

I particularly like Goku's voice here. All inquisitive and innocent, unaware of all the shadows he's digging up. Really liked it, WELL DONE!

(In Loco Parentis) opalmatrix June 10 2009, 02:17:52 UTC

I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Of the four of them, Goku's voice gives me the most difficulty, so it's very special that this worked so well for you.

lady_ganesh May 30 2009, 00:09:57 UTC

Bebeh Goku cracks me up. Nice work!

(In Loco Parentis) opalmatrix June 10 2009, 02:18:48 UTC

Awww ... thanks! He can be a little troublesome for me - I have to take my head wa-a-ay back, it seems.

Re: (In Loco Parentis) lady_ganesh June 10 2009, 02:25:38 UTC

You have to keep your thoughts very straightforward and simple, and that helps. (For me, anyway!)

tochira May 30 2009, 02:03:40 UTC

"Didn't I tell you, I could never leave an idiot like you alone?"

"Oh. Yeah! Thank you, Sanzo!"

That was so perfect. I'm still laughing!

(In Loco Parentis) opalmatrix June 10 2009, 02:20:25 UTC

I'm so glad that worked for you! I think Goku's like a dog in a lot of ways - he reads the heart, not the words.