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Sequence of Upsets: A Heisei Kumi Fanfic (23/23)

May 10, 2014 00:57

Author: ryosukekoibito
Pairing: Keito/Shoon (Shoto?), with some side Ariyama and Chiitaro
Rating: R, for violence and dark themes
Warnings: Character Death
Genre: Slice of life/Angst
Disclaimer: I own nothing but the plot.
Summary: Keito has been in the Heisei Kumi for nearly 2 years now. He has a wonderful boyfriend, and he's become a strong fighter ( Read more... )

multi-chap: sequence of upsets

Comments 16

sayukino11 May 10 2014, 07:14:34 UTC

uwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

S-S...Shoon died?!!!!!! HUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUUHUHUHUUHUH................
I didn't cared the people's stares on me when I cried about the last chapter....though its embarrassing.....

Gaining Your Love???? You Found Me??? Tea and Lace???
I want to read those!!!!!!!

Otsukare!!!!

ryosukekoibito May 12 2014, 15:08:39 UTC

Aww. You cried? *passes tissues*

Thank you for your continued support! I'll do my best!

mysteriousgal11 May 10 2014, 23:51:45 UTC

Owariiiii TT~TT
I deeeemand a part 3 *crying*

Shoon diedddddddd :( well it's expected but so so so saaaadddddddd (ノ┯_┯)ノ~┻━┻

Cannnnn Keitoooo be happyyyy withhh Shoonnnn? Prettyyyy pleaseeee *puppy eyes*

But over all, the fic is really good!

And will wait for all of your fics ♥

ryosukekoibito May 12 2014, 15:19:26 UTC

You want a part 3? Noted.

Yeah, he died. :( I was sad about it too.

I'm glad you liked the fic!

I look forward to hearing from you in the future!

qq_the_pengu May 11 2014, 13:34:49 UTC

i almost cried T.T

hmmm... i'm excited to read ur upcoming fics!!! ^_^

By the way, i'm new here, but i already read ur fics before...

ryosukekoibito May 12 2014, 15:20:40 UTC

You're new? Welcome!

I'll be looking forward to hearing from you in the future! ^-^

candiiaddict May 12 2014, 15:44:52 UTC

It's finally the end?! It's been an amazing 23 chapters, except now I'm so curious about what happens after Shoon's death. I can't wait for the chiitaro-centered fic !! I'm sure that it'll be brilliant so I'm anticipating the time when you finish writing it.

Thank you soooooo much for posting so regularly, you are one of the most dedicated users (and also my favourite writer!) It must have taken a lot of time and effort ♡ Every single one of your fics are majestic and wonderful and I always get really happy reading them. I'd say that you deserve a long break from fic writing (and your exams!), but then I'll miss commenting on your updates and reading your fics way too much. I hope you have a magnificent day today !! ♡♡ I'll be eagerly awaiting your next post ♪

ryosukekoibito May 15 2014, 17:11:38 UTC

It's finally the end. I'm so glad you enjoyed it; hopefully when I get the chiitaro-centered one up you like it as well. It's a bit different from the others.

Awww, thank you so much. I know I try to keep to a bit of a schedule when I post--it often doesn't work out, but I try. Just to pace myself. I'm glad my writing makes you happy. That's the goal of fic, right? It's meant purely for enjoyment. I should have the first chapter of my next fic up in a few days! I hope you too have a fantastic day, lovely!!♡

kiwi_tan May 31 2015, 21:42:07 UTC

Guess who's back? back again. Kiwi's back rUN FOR YOUR LIFE BEFORE YOU HAVE TOE EXPERIENCE YET ANOTHER LONG-ASS COMMENT.

I guess I have to go from chapter 3 becAUSE THAT'S WHEN SHIT REALLY STARTS TO STIR:

~ Daiki immediately pulled himself to his knees on top of Kamiki, arm pulled back to deliver the intense frenzy of punches he always had saved for occasions like this one. Same Daiki, same - I must say this image is very strong like, with Daiki's fighting style I'm guessing he's quite a quick paced fighter when he punches etc? okAY BUT THEN POOR DAIKI HOLY SHIT. Poor guy I felt so bad for him, when that sorta thing happens by accident - your heart can't help but go out to the lil dragon ;; evERYTHING WENT INTERESTING and then when Yamada and Daiki stare at each other for like an eternity I was expecting one of them to run out, but no, they were dragged out lmao - I kinda wonder, if they hadn't been dragged away by the other members what do you think would've ended up happening between them?

~ "Uh huh. Look at you, pretending to be ( ... )

kiwi_tan May 31 2015, 21:43:53 UTC

~ "So you're telling me that I've been sleeping with a minor?" You have no idea how much this cracked me up like - Shoon has killed and beaten up and done all sorts of Yakuza-like things but the prospect of sleeping with a minor oH GOD I'M BREAKING THE LAW NO (His logic makes me lol I'm sorry)

~Urgh also Hikaru is so cuTE - does he know that he actually has feelings for Keito or does he pretend its purely platonic?

~ The convo when Shoon and Keito are calling out to eachother in chapter 7 while fighting off random enemies is so cute idk man it kinda reminded me of pirates of the Caribbean (in a good way)

~ Shoon is also boss as fuck man

~ What happened to Keito's nightmares? did they just dwindle and go away over time or did he just unconsciously completely forget about them with everything going on with Shoon?

~ Chinen immediately turned his attention to his boyfriend, a warm smile on his face, and Keito was shocked by the complete one-eighty. Chinen was completely different around Ryutaro. He seemed warmer, happier, and more ( ... )

ryosukekoibito June 1 2015, 02:13:42 UTC

~Poor Daiki is right. I feel like Yamada, and the other boys, but especially Yamada (and Inoo) have really softened him up a lot, he's more open to feeling than he was when he was younger, and he cares more about how the rest of them perceive him. He wants them to love him, and he wants to love himself, but murdering someone, even by accident, can really put a dent in your self image, and can really change the way people perceive you. That was why he was distancing himself from Yamada so much after Kamiki died. He had this fear that maybe he wouldn't love him anymore; wouldn't want him anymore, that he'd managed to drive Yamada away, and he was regretting it, and mourning, and punishing himself for it. And that fear extended to all of them, but once Yamada had convinced him that he wasn't going anywhere, Daiki managed to eventually, with Yamada's help, come to realize that they all still loved him ( ... )

ryosukekoibito June 1 2015, 02:13:57 UTC

~So with the Wakaba their whole thing was that word had kinda gotten around that Chinen and Ryu were a thing, and they were going to hurt the kumi by stealing and beating up the leader's boyfriend. They didn't know that Ryu had run away, and they didn't believe him when he told them that no one would come for him. They just beat him up, fed him inadequately, and tried to get him to spill inside information about the heisei kumi ( ... )

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