A week and a half late on this chapter - oh man, I was not counting on this taking so long. >.> I've had a pretty good run on this story so far, but this chapter kicked my arse - which I was expecting, but not quite on this scale. This would be what happens when you finally get to scenes you've been building towards for pretty much the whole damn
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No shit. Doumeki dug himself a hole nearly 6ft deep there. He doesn't mean to take advantage of Watanuki but its not like he's the talkative type. Not forgetting these are two very lonely people here.
This can... well it CAN end well. Just beware of the bumps, spikes and that humougous pit in the road on the way. ^^;
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So yeah - Doumeki may not have quite known where things were going, but he's not in any way going to be unhappy with where they've gotten him. But that would be something that later scenes should deal with. ^^;
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Er, to respond to your actual comment, I'm not sure why people think this development is so likely to be a bad thing. >.> Maybe the next chapter or two should clear that up though assuming they get posted and all - things *are* still pretty raw right where I finished this part. But for now just rest assured I've put Doumeki and Watanuki through enough of the emotional wringer for one fic - all is essentially resolved on this front, and the difficult parts left to write in ( ... )
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I guess I just went askdhjf because - well, Watanuki says it all in the next part, really. That he's had so little kindness or care showed towards him that it could very well impact on the health of any given relationship (although of course I trust Doumeki with pretty much anything XD). Add to that Watanuki's inherent attraction of trouble, and... |D;
(I am looking forward to finding out what exactly all the April Fool stuff is about in this world, though. :3)
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apparently, my brain has decided to go to its happy place, far away from me.
He needed Doumeki’s acceptance so badly he’d make everything that stood in front of it his own fault. This was someone who didn’t even know how to ask for anything that was purely for himself.
this was the most poignant part for me. the second sentence completely describes watanuki, in any world.
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the second sentence completely describes watanuki, in any world.
Very true - if even more so in this world. I'm glad that part stood out like that, it was one of the ones I was hoping would. ^_^
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I love all they April Fool's day mystery and the backstories and everything. I don't normally comment (sorry!), but it's been an awesome story so far.
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Poor confused Watanuki, yeah Doumeki has been giving some mixed signals, but at least no he has at last come to a decision. one that involves kissing
This was who the April Fool had always been ... He needed Doumeki’s acceptance so badly he’d make everything that stood in front of it his own fault. This was someone who didn’t even know how to ask for anything that was purely for himself. I love this section, so so Watanuki. It makes my heart break for him. Watanuki's experince at this camp has been so different from his previous experinces that we and Doumeki do need to be reminded that a part of him is still waiting for the other shoe to drop while hoping desperitly that it won't do too much damage when it does.
so tired of Watanuki’s sick attempts at compromise; tired of watching Watanuki wonder whether the person who’s trust ( ... )
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...we and Doumeki do need to be reminded that a part of him is still waiting for the other shoe to drop while hoping desperitly that it won't do too much damage when it does.
Oh yes, well put and still so very, very true.
I also really enjoyed the Doumeki and Kurogane interaction, it is so much fun to see how 2 people who have not interacted in cannon would behave, and I think you manage it very well indeed.And it's hugely gratifying to hear that part stood out too, because that whole section of this chapter actually took me more work and rewriting than the final scene did. Mostly, getting the ( ... )
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Really? I'm so glad to hear that. :D
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