Fic: Vuja De

Feb 18, 2008 03:02

Fandom: Stargate: Atlantis
Title: Vujà Dé
Author: Quasar (quasar273)
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: John/Rodney
Date written: February 2008
Length: ~11,000 words

Spoilers: many eps up to 4x15 Outcast
Warnings: borderline underage (15 year old with 16 year old)

Summary: It's bad enough being a teenager and probably gay, but going crazy makes it all worse.

Vuja De )

fanfic, mcshep, atlantis

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raincitygirl February 19 2008, 08:24:03 UTC
Oh, NICELY done.

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quasar273 February 19 2008, 09:07:41 UTC
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

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djinanna February 19 2008, 08:58:18 UTC
Sad and frightening and wistful and painful and a bit of lovely at the end. And the emotional impact comes from both the "present" and the memories of the future ( ... )

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quasar273 February 19 2008, 09:24:39 UTC
Wow, thanks so much for the very thoughtful comments! I have to admit very little of that was planned at a conscious level. That's just how the pacing worked out -- John's angst was pretty much all internal, and though it was intensely emotional for him, that was all below the surface so it needed lots of fat paragraphs describing John's thoughts. Even the dialogue scene with the guidance counselor had so many underlying thoughts it got slowed down ( ... )

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lilac_way February 19 2008, 21:20:16 UTC
I have to admit very little of that was planned at a conscious level. That's just how the pacing worked out -- John's angst was pretty much all internal, and though it was intensely emotional for him, that was all below the surface so it needed lots of fat paragraphs describing John's thoughts. Even the dialogue scene with the guidance counselor had so many underlying thoughts it got slowed down.
But of course Rodney is all about the fast talking so it had a very different rhythm once he showed up and forced John to talk about what was happening. To the extent I was aware of that, I worried a little that the pacing was unbalanced, and I tried to use the flash-forwards to offset some of it. But you make the unbalanced pace sound deliberate and meaningful and clever -- I love it!I think that is how some of the best pieces work though -- you are trying to do one thing, and an entirely different objective (that's not the word I want, but all I can come up with) blossoms out of that. I just took a class with a poetry professor that said ( ... )

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devin_chain February 19 2008, 11:02:25 UTC
Wonderfully imaginative fic!

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quasar273 February 19 2008, 18:36:45 UTC
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

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neek_love February 19 2008, 13:22:23 UTC
Oooh, stunning!
An excellent premise wonderfully executed. All of the characters spot on, and the way you wove the past/present and the future/present was brilliant!

In conclusion - fic good.

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quasar273 February 19 2008, 18:37:16 UTC
Thanks for the comments, I'm glad to know you enjoyed!

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i_am_the_crime February 19 2008, 13:37:19 UTC
Very cool, I really liked this.

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quasar273 February 19 2008, 18:37:29 UTC
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

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