CRITIQUE

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CRITIQUE POST

If you're looking for some input or opinions on your characterization, then you've come to the right post.

If you're looking for critique, list your character names and their journals. Anonymous replies are allowed as responses, so keep that in mind

Comments

[thorn_of_rose]

Ooh, ooh, me.

Asellus thorn_of_rose
Kanan technoballistic
Yuna everfaythful

[thorn_of_rose]

Asellus: I'll admit that I haven't played a whole lot of the game she's from, but as a character in general, I really like her~ She's fun and very human in the way she reacts to things and such. I like that. :3

Kanan: I'm normally so leery about OC's, but you pull this one off wonderfully. She fits in with the rest of the cast really well. I'd love to get some of mine interacting with her more. ;~;

I can't say much about Yuna because I've not really interacted with her and haven't played that game. D: But I like what I've seen, none the less~

[technoballistic]

Thank you! I have some plans for Sellz, character-wise, that'll explain a lot more about her, but I'm waiting to let these things flesh out. As for Kanan, I try really really hard to make a point that she's NOT this hero-type character but just a normal person tossed into a not-so-normal place and trying to keep it together. I really, really appreciate any ideas anyone has for how to have her grow a little more, and I really need to get her out to meet new people and expand her worldview, as well as solidify her, but I'm so glad people like her. Send some of yours to interact, PLEASE! She needs more friends!

[sniping_targets]

I don't know anything about Yuna and I don't follow her in Purg, so I cam't say. But! The other two, yes~

Kanan is nifty. I really like her, can't place my finger on why but, but I do. If she was canon in the game, she'd be one of my favorites.

Annnd Sellz. I don't know anythign about the game, but I can say that I believe she's awesome. She gets my seal of approval for awesomeness.

[cataclysmicly]

Naminé, crepusculine
Cissnei, cataclysmicly
Yazoo, effervescingly

Also, even though I dropped them, there will always be a chance of me picking back up others, so... if you want to leave crit for any of my past characters, pleeeease do:

Final Fantasy VII:
Cloud, cloudingly
Genesis, genesissy

GetBackers:
Ginji, genkibynature
Kazuki, kotostrings
Toshiki, emblazoning

Kingdom Hearts:
Cloud, xaltercatiox
Larxene, sadisticstorm
Leon, hushedrain
Marluxia, scythingly
Sora, brightestheart

Sorcerer Hunters:
Millefeuille, suzakusknight

[cataclysmicly]

ilur naminé like burnniiiingg.

She's polite, and she's willing to help, even if people have forgotten her. And she's actually attempts to be friends with people she doesn't like. XD which is something that, well, I see Naminé doing a lot. her and Zack are love. lovelovelove. Keep up the good work, dollface~. ♥

[cataclysmicly]

ffjadlk. Thank youuuu. ;~;

[technoballistic]

I haven't had much interaction with your kids, sadly (THIS NEEDS FIXIN K?) but I love your portrayal of them, though sometimes my opinion of Cissnei (as a character, not as how you're playing her, if that makes any sense) wavers back and forth, but if anything it makes her seem more human. Your Yazoo and Rinoa's conversation back when made me die of laughing a little, and Namine makes me want to snuggle her SO HARD.

[covert_chord]

I've been dying for one of these.

Allelujah Haptism, covert_chord
Damien Bennett, flawedintent
Cosmas Krelborne, innate_speculum
Rubedo/Jr., makarovs_pewpew

[kagami2k]

While I don't know the series Allelujah is from, I just had to say you rock at handling split personalities. :3 I like reading his reactions.

[covert_chord]

I'm happy to hear that I'm managing it well ♥ I swear I've got a MPD fetish or something.

[kagami2k]

Out of curiosity, did you know he was going to have MPD when you took him up? I very vaguely remember that the series was just starting. So did it come as a surprise to you? XD For me, it was like, Oh, he seems like a nice sweet dude, and then... oh nice.

[astagnantpause]

Sure, me too. I'm genuinely curious to know how I'm doing, so. D:

Rude, astagnantpause
Saya and Haji, chiropterans
Walter Sullivan, holyassumption
chaos, lightandwings

[astagnantpause]

You're easily the best Rude I've seen, okay. He's got that quietness about him, still kind awkward and all that, but he's not... I don't know. He's not into extremes in any sense of the word, which is how Rude should be. (Not emo, not temperamental, etc.) Good job. I hope you keep him around. ;~~~;

[technoballistic]

...Dude, seriously? Just about everyone you touch is turned to gold, but.

OK, in order:

Rude: You KNOW I love your Rude. He's just snarky enough sometimes, and he's got that softer side that has an AWESOME juxtaposition with the Turk side of him and makes him feel like a REAL person and not, uh, Pinocchio. I loves Rude.

Saya/Haji: ....EEEEEK. Haji needs more playtime, but that's not so much a critique as a request. Sellz ADORES Saya, she really does. The other two haven't interacted with her, but she's so dead-on, as is Haji.

Walter: I haven't had much interaction with Walter, but I do love how creepy he is. It's hard to pull off creepy and you do it so WELL.

chaos: chaos makes me happy. Very happy. In my pants. He's pretty much dead-on. Are you SURE you weren't a scriptwriter for Xenosaga?

[astagnantpause]

:O ...chaos might make you even happier in your pants if you ask nicely, I DUNNO

[shishiwaka]

Shishiwakamaru shishiwaka
Marina Montiallo turnipxgirl
Piiko piiko_chan
Shura xgoatlingx
Sesshoumaru inu_lord
Amarissa shotgunxturk
Marron Glace young_mystic
Koenma koenmaxdaioh
Ayame snakesrme
Shiori minamino_shiori

[shishiwaka]

the only two that i know, so...

marron is pretty good. definitely one of the better marron's i've seen (and i've been in the SH fandom for yeeeears, so i've seen a lot of them). he's quiet without being broody or emo, and he's friendly in his own soft-spoken sort of way and helpful.

amarissa, though my knowledge with BC is limited, seems very sweet and still professional when the need calls for it, which i like to see in a lot of the turks.

good job on both!

[shotgunxturk]

Thank you ♥!

[shishiwaka]

Most of yours I'm unfamiliar with. I was really surprised to find a Marron Glace here too. XD I wish we got to see more of the goofy little temper he seldomly shows, but maybe we'd need a Carrot or Gateau before that could happen, lol.

Amarissa is a real cutie. <3 She doesn't stand out a WHOLE lot yet, but maybe as she progresses in her role here she'll individuate herself a little more. It'd be fun to see more of her as BC describes her: rather show-offy and bombastic and with a love of appearing stylish in addition to her admirable devotion to her duties.