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princeofwriting

fic: Naïveté (Mizuki/Yuuta)

Oct 26, 2006 01:03

Title: Naïveté
Author: princeofwriting, aka Echizen Ryoma
Rating: PG (for 2 f-bombs)
Summary: Mizuki gets Yuuta a birthday gift.
Notes: Done for fsshuuukitty, who requested Mizuki/Yuuta, purple, and wasabi here. Hope you like it, Kaidoh-senpai. (498 words)

( Naïveté )

fic

Comments 107

redribbonboy October 26 2006, 05:17:28 UTC

You made Mizuki too much of a person.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:18:20 UTC

What?

redribbonboy October 26 2006, 05:19:41 UTC

Nothing really.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:21:33 UTC

Tell me. I want to get it right next time.

Thread 61

thereal_buchou October 26 2006, 05:17:49 UTC

Even though there do NOT need to be more of those shirts at St. Rudolph than there already are... ¬_¬

It was still good.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:19:09 UTC

Heh. Would it make you feel any better if I said that Yuuta burns it later?

Thanks though.

thereal_buchou October 26 2006, 05:20:32 UTC

Yes, actually. Makes me feel MUCH better.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:23:29 UTC

Good. He couldn't get to Mizuki's though. Sorry.

Thread 11

nfufufufu October 26 2006, 05:26:07 UTC

This was quite a fantastic work of fiction. You are clearly an author of acute perception and high standard, but what really made this fiction shine and sparkle with a true touch of genius was the fact it was about me.

My presence in anything has that effect, you don't have to thank me for giving your work the extra dash of mastery your mundane words would have otherwise starved without.

Also, my data flags up one small but crucial flaw- I think you should remove that part after the asterisk, it makes no sense. The fiction will be perfect after this adjustment.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:30:46 UTC

Um... right.

Definitely no need to thank you.

The last part was from Yuuta's point of view. It adds balance and a different point of view. It kinda of has to be there.

nfufufufu October 26 2006, 05:34:16 UTC

Your balance is superfluous.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:39:19 UTC

Yuuta disagrees.

Thread 8

brother_beater October 26 2006, 05:34:09 UTC

yes. um. just. yes. mostly to the last part after the astricks because i'd NEVER wear those hideous shirts. they're only for mizuki-san to "pull off"...and by that i don't mean REMOVE. i mean...he would wear them.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:38:45 UTC

Hn. Yeah, I think I know what you mean about that. Anyone but Atobe in ruffles, for example, is... kind of retarded. Not that they're all that great on him either, just... you know.

brother_beater October 26 2006, 06:23:15 UTC

exactly. mizuki and atobe are the only ones who could pull them off in that...way they do. not that its good. just that it IS. just. yeah. you know.

brother_beater October 26 2006, 06:24:28 UTC

oh yeah. i almost forgot.

oota_kakeru October 26 2006, 05:46:09 UTC

You made Mizuki sorta likeable and it was funny. Awesome.

princeofwriting October 26 2006, 05:46:55 UTC

I tried. Thank you.