fic: Naïveté (Mizuki/Yuuta)

[princeofwriting]

Title: Naïveté
Author: princeofwriting, aka Echizen Ryoma
Rating: PG (for 2 f-bombs)
Summary: Mizuki gets Yuuta a birthday gift.
Notes: Done for fsshuuukitty, who requested Mizuki/Yuuta, purple, and wasabi here. Hope you like it, Kaidoh-senpai. (498 words)

Comments

[nfufufufu]

This was quite a fantastic work of fiction. You are clearly an author of acute perception and high standard, but what really made this fiction shine and sparkle with a true touch of genius was the fact it was about me.

My presence in anything has that effect, you don't have to thank me for giving your work the extra dash of mastery your mundane words would have otherwise starved without.

Also, my data flags up one small but crucial flaw- I think you should remove that part after the asterisk, it makes no sense. The fiction will be perfect after this adjustment.

[princeofwriting]

Um... right.

Definitely no need to thank you.

The last part was from Yuuta's point of view. It adds balance and a different point of view. It kinda of has to be there.

[nfufufufu]

Your balance is superfluous.

[princeofwriting]

Yuuta disagrees.

[nfufufufu]

Yuuta is my little rebel.

[princeofwriting]

Cute.

[nfufufufu]

I am, aren't I.

[princeofwriting]

Nice lack of a question mark there.