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[pottersues]

Well, today's entry is different from what we normally see, but still all to similar.

Edit: There is a possibility that the writer of Wands and Winx has found out that her fanfic was featured here and has sicked some of her friends on the journal thread. While I don't mind you guys replying please keep in mind that I also don't want to lock down

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[hotaruofkonoha]

I saw "Ariana" and the first thought that popped into my head was Ariana Black and I was about to say "NOOOO SHE'S BACK."

But then I realized, no, she's not back.

Okay. Good.

Why do we need this list of teachers?

[pottersues]

Take a good look at who is teaching P.E.

[hotaruofkonoha]

WTF I DON'T EVEN.

I didn't even notice Oh my, why would you..

What. What. What.

[sapnish]

I just imagined him dressed up as Richard Simmons XD

[sapnish]

I understand the plot bunny thing. My mind is full of them right now, but just publishing the first thing that pops out of your mind is not very professional. If the suethor was reading this, I would advise her to do a little research on the characters. Is not that hard, the Harry Potter wiki has everything that has ever been published and is very well organized. But I'm sorry, I have a list of teachers to mock:

Augusta Longbottom - Politics & Finance

I would not picture her as a mentor for insecure teenagers. As a mentor for soldiers, on the other hand...

Arabella Figg - Muggle Studies (compulsory for those raised in a Magical environment, removed at third-year)
Jerome Resort - Wizard Studies (compuslory for those raised in a Muggle environment, removed at third-year)

Why? Isn't Hogwarts against segregation of origin? And why does it have to be compulsory?

Perenelle Flamel - Art (fifth-year elective), Music (fifth-year elective)WHY?! Why Perenelle? Unlike the other characters listed here, she really existed and was really not an

[indigoneutrino]

Some of these choices for subjects and teachers just seem to make no sense. Firstly, I'm going to have to assume Politics and Finance means Magical Politics and Finance, otherwise it's just baffling, but why is it not an elective? That kind of subject isn't even compulsory in Muggle schools, let alone magical ones. And I agree that Augusta Longbottom makes no sense as a teacher. I mean, wouldn't it make more sense to have someone who used to work for Gringotts for that kind of thing

[sapnish]

So the list would actually be something like:

Magical Politics and Finance (elective)---Bill Weasley

Muggle Studies---I don't know...Dean Thomas?

Alchemy---Nicolas and Perenelle Flamel

PE---It wouldn't be teached at Hogwarts, because It's kind of stupid.

[rodentfanatic]

Apparently Aberforth adopting Voldemort is enough to teach a child who was born because of a love potion the concept of love.

Actually, that I could buy. A big part of the books is how it's our CHOICES that make us who were are and nothing is actually pre-determined, it's all about our actions, not what we're born with. Granted, the whole 'he was born from forced/fake love and thus can't know love' is probably a deliberate metaphor on the part of JKR, I don't think it's totally unreasonable to go with the idea that a different upbringing could have inclined Tom Riddle to make different choices. I *do* personally think he was born a sociopath and would be one no matter what, but since it's not stated (to my memory) in canon, I don't see it as necessarily being wrong that maybe his environment was what inclined him (not made him, because again the emphasis of the books on choice) that way instead

[yemi_hikari]

When the writer simply tells us something like this, we're left questioning if it is actually possible. It would depend on when he got adopted. I love your last paragraph. And yes, they're good ideas but not fleshed out enough.

[indigoneutrino]

Snape was bowing on a cliff overlooking Hogwarts. Snape was panting and waiting for someone.

That's just not a good way to start a story in the slightest. Beginning two consecutive sentences with "Snape was" just sounds so awkward to read. The Suethor could have tried combining them: "Snape was stood on a cliff overlooking Hogwarts, bowed down and panting as he waited for someone." Although actually, that's still a bit weird. He's bowing, which poses the question what's he bowing to? (Or is this even the right word for this context?) He's panting, so what has he been doing that's led to this? And who's he waiting for? I think that's too many questions to pose in one go. How about: "Snape had reached the top of the cliff, where he stood hunched over and panting from the exertion of the run that took him there. He looked down at the towers and turrets of Hogwarts castle below, waiting patiently for someone to arrive."

Also, the next part bothers me: "With a silent pop..." Now there's an oxymoron.

[darth_gojira]

Does this even COUNT as a Harry Potter fic?