Star Wars work in progress You Became to Me

[polgarawolf]

Thirtieth part of a WIP
Title: You Became to Me (as suggested by avari_maethor)
*Pairing: Mainly Anakin/Obi-Wan with some mention of Padmé
Rating: Fairly PG-13ish now, but inevitably at least an R (?)
Disclaimer: I do not own the lovely boys from Star Wars, more's the pity! What I do have is an extremely contrary muse that refuses to shut up and leave me alone

Comments

[polgarawolf]

*Blushes* Thank you so much for letting me know you like it! I am a person who thrives on many words and detailed descriptions, but I always worry that others will get fed up and skim or try to skip ahead. I've spent a while trying to research some of these characters and really get into their heads, to get past the surface and really try to understand what makes them tick (and why and how), and at this point I've gotten so used to their voices that I just hope others think I'm doing them justice, relaying those voices. And yes, I am going to be working on this for quite a while longer, I think. The work's slowed down some because of the holidays (I have certain baking duties, among others), but I'm not planning on stopping any time soon. The muse has still got a lot to say about what happens after they confront the Council.

[modillian]

Good Lord, woman, I've just spent the better half of the afternoon reading the past ten chapters. I...have no words. When I can sufficiently explain what and how I like this, I'll post it. Instead I can say:

1. Wonderful descriptions, full-bodied, very imaginative. Some parts seem a bit wordy, but it goes well with the style and matches Stover's tone in the books.

2. AU-ed to hell as this is (and a wonderful way to wing it, I say), the character descriptions you've given are very poignant and telling. For example, Sidious's pathological megalomania is very well-put (he really is not sane), Obi-Wan alienation, and Mace's attachment to the Republic were brought out in a manner I hadn't considered before.

3. I am in great anticipation to see you churn out this massive Jedi treat over the next few months (you said you would continue it for a while, yes?)

Engaging, gloriously long, with excellent forethought and plotting, I am very very excited to read more in this universe. *prostrates like the Jedi Council to the Chosen One and the

[polgarawolf]

PS I hope you do post more about your reaction to the individual parts. It helps so much if I know what people are liking more or are having difficulties with. Anyway, thanks again for the compliments and encouragement! I'm hoping I'll have more time to write after Thanksgiving is over with.

[polgarawolf]

If it makes you feel any better, Dooku is still just a little bit of a cypher to me, too. He's going to be doing some -- penance, I suppose? Well, making reparations for what he's done, too. I haven't gotten far enough with the aftermath of Palpatine/Sidious' death from the political end of things to get enough of it down to post yet, but the knowledge he has of Sidious' many plans (including Byss) and the tools/allies who knew him as a Sith Lord is going to be fairly invaluable. Obi-Wan and Anakin are just going to be too busy to head up the new Council, at least at first. Qui-Gon is actually replacing Yoda as the nominal head of the Council. Dooku will be the second in command, as Mace has been. They'll be able to spend more time in the actual Temple than Obi-Wan and Anakin, at least at first, because of their ability to essentially move anywhere instantaneously within the Force. Really, it's more an issue of logistics and convenience (and that the four of them have agreed that it'll be easier for the rest of the Jedi and the former

[avari_maethor]

Man... these chapters must take forever but they are wonderful! -hugs-

[polgarawolf]

It's taken a while to write it all, yes. The going is now very slow, with all the holiday shopping and wrapping and baking and so on and so forth, ad infinitium *Takes deep breath* It doesn't help that I'm writing things out of order now because of something that came up with Bail. I'm hoping to get gaps filled in so I can get a new chapter posted from my WordPerfect file by this Friday. *Crosses fingers*

[anakin415]

goodness finally all of it. You have a love of detail and obviously did alot of research besides the books. well done. There are a few times you come a bit out of character but that is always authors choice. Its nothign signifigant just choice of words and sentances. Nothing absolutely major. Sometimes you did go in my opinion too far with your descriptive of things but again I am sure you will continue this story which inturn some fo thsoe details will be coming into play. Definatly grand on the novel scale. well done indeed. Now are you going to revise chapters as you go or is this right now the draft you are going by ?

[polgarawolf]

I've tried to research as much as I can, but I'm not as familiar with some of my characters as I'd like to be, especially Dooku and even Qui-Gon. I've changed a few things outright from the canon and EU - the Temple on Coruscant, for one, especially regarding the contents and the look of the suite Obi-Wan shares first with Qui-Gon and then Anakin - but I've tried to keep the people in character. Please let me know where I've screwed up, if the people aren't sounding right to you. Dialogue for Yoda is actually surprisingly hard, and although I can usually hear Obi-Wan and Anakin fairly clearly and tell whether or not something sounds right (except for when Anakin is little - I've been thinking that some of his lines to Bail might be off, but I haven't had time to try to fix them yet), I have a harder time telling with the others

[anakin415]

Give me a week or two. I hope not longer lol. I am trying to get my website up for my fan fiction archive. Once I get htat in order than i can sit down and go thru chapter by chapter and give you better notes. Again though please remember this little things are just that, little. I repect your love of detail as I have the same trait so I figured I should share. Your direction and your take on the ordeal is astounding. You have taken on quite a bit and it is coming along well. I am hoping that this isnt daunting you. Revisions and revisions are painstakingly common but in the end I think we become prouder of our work and it becomes a true piece of art or in this case fiction lol.

[polgarawolf]

*Grins* I am only daunted (and usually only mildly) whenever I stop to think about how many revisions I've done and how many I think I'll probably still have to do and how much more of the story I think there still is to write before it'll really be done. Well, not done, done, because more and more I'm getting the feeling that this is going to be more than one story's worth of stuff, but done enough to come to a stop and not be completely in the midst of things (like it is right now). Thanks so much for responding as much as you have and for saying you'll look at it again! I really need to break down and beg for a beta, but I've never had one before and my response time tends to be weird because my internet time is always more limited than I'd like it to be, so I've no idea how to go about finding one and I'm sort of halfway afraid of running anyone who agreed to be my beta off with my general scatty-ness, if that makes sense . . . Trying to edit and write just from a few scattered responses is harder than I would've expected it to be