Summer Boy

[teafortwelve]

Title: Summer Boy
Author: teafortwelve (Tara)
Rating: G
Verse: Gen V, Gameverse.
Characters: Black/White
Summary: His summer ends when she leaves. It's as simple as that.
Author's Note: Comments and crits are loved. <3 This will probably be completely OOC for them when the games are released, but for now, just take their characterizations as my personal

Comments

[wordsnatcher]

omg this is so adorable
despite knowing next to nothing about black & white, somehow this feels really in-character for them - black as the small town boy and white as the beautiful, adventurous stranger <3
/already ships them way too hard

it also fits in with the theme really well, so... bonus points! haha
mijumaru could not be cuter ; u;

[teafortwelve]

T-thank you so much. o///o
Haha, yes, that's the same sorta impression I got from them. x3 They're too sweet together, imo, because of that difference in personality.

Mijumaru is my one & only, lol. ;~;

Thanks again!

[keltenaasule]

The first word that comes to mind for this is 'pretty'. The writing is pretty; the imagery is vivid and even prettier. It's simply written and touching; I love the Pokemon's PoV sections, as I think they're a lot more telling than the human PoVs. The opening sentence is also beautiful.

As said above, this fits perfectly with the theme as well. It really brought a smile to my face.

[teafortwelve]

Thank you so much!! <3
I'm glad my writing made you smile; your comments made me smile, haha. x3

[bitternarration]

That was really cute. For some reason the image I had of Mijumaru hiding behind Black's leg from the evolved form of Tsutaja makes me laugh. It was a really good story.

[teafortwelve]

Thank you! o///o
Teehee, yes, I can easily picture Mijumaru as being a shy Pokemon. x3

[ibuberu]

Ohhhh, this was a joy to read! I really liked the way you wrote, and the metaphors you used and your style is enchanting, I was really swept away by your words, especially the beautiful phrases like 'She is born at the start of the summer and dies at the end of it, but sometimes her death is premature.' and 'He waits through the prologue of autumn, the chilling chapter of winter, the new novel of spring and the old pages of summer, but she never arrives.' Absolutely stunning writing here *3* The initial plot was simple and perhaps cliche actually, I'm almost afraid to say ><;

But truthfully I still ended up enjoying it because the way you described and portrayed Black's thoughts along with Mijumaru's companionship is really unique, so I'm glad you managed to pull it off because I got a lot out of reading this C: Though at one part I thought your wording could have been better, ' “Tomorrow,” she says, after decades have passed.' sounds almost too literal, but it could just be me. Still, I really liked this, excellent work! Props for

[teafortwelve]

Thank you so much! o///o I don't think anyone has called my writing style enchanting before; that means a lot. x3

I'm glad you got something out of it! And hm, true... I'll have to work on rephrasing that if I ever post this elsewhere. xD Thanks!

Teehee, I couldn't resist mentioning them, even in passing. <3 Thanks so so so much~!