Summer Boy

[teafortwelve]

Title: Summer Boy
Author: teafortwelve (Tara)
Rating: G
Verse: Gen V, Gameverse.
Characters: Black/White
Summary: His summer ends when she leaves. It's as simple as that.
Author's Note: Comments and crits are loved. <3 This will probably be completely OOC for them when the games are released, but for now, just take their characterizations as my personal

Comments

[ibuberu]

Ohhhh, this was a joy to read! I really liked the way you wrote, and the metaphors you used and your style is enchanting, I was really swept away by your words, especially the beautiful phrases like 'She is born at the start of the summer and dies at the end of it, but sometimes her death is premature.' and 'He waits through the prologue of autumn, the chilling chapter of winter, the new novel of spring and the old pages of summer, but she never arrives.' Absolutely stunning writing here *3* The initial plot was simple and perhaps cliche actually, I'm almost afraid to say ><;

But truthfully I still ended up enjoying it because the way you described and portrayed Black's thoughts along with Mijumaru's companionship is really unique, so I'm glad you managed to pull it off because I got a lot out of reading this C: Though at one part I thought your wording could have been better, ' “Tomorrow,” she says, after decades have passed.' sounds almost too literal, but it could just be me. Still, I really liked this, excellent work! Props for including Cheren and Belle haha.

[teafortwelve]

Thank you so much! o///o I don't think anyone has called my writing style enchanting before; that means a lot. x3

I'm glad you got something out of it! And hm, true... I'll have to work on rephrasing that if I ever post this elsewhere. xD Thanks!

Teehee, I couldn't resist mentioning them, even in passing. <3 Thanks so so so much~!