Afterlife - Ch.10 (Final)

[pimprevster]

Title: Afterlife
Pairing: Matt/Jimmy
Rating: NC-17 (FINALLY SEX YEAH)
Disclaimer: I do not own the characters, and as far as I know, none of this really happened.
Summary:
A translucent haze. Endless dreaming.
Dreams. Memories. Aren’t they the same now?
Feels like it.
But they’re only memories...
Memories we can never make again.
Memories that feel so

Comments

[zeevee3]

Awwwwwwwwh ^_^ that was awesome! Yes you and Brian do have some explaining to do!

I read chapters 4-9 in an INCREDIBLY boring geography lesson today through which I was kept sane buy this then got home from a maths exam (urgh...) to find this! Bad day un-rubbish-ified! (that's a word now)

EPILOGUE EPILOGUE EPILOGUE!!!!!! (i think you get the idea there :P)

[pimprevster]

HOORAY! I un-rubbish-ified somebody's day. That's an accomplishment. ^u^

Thank you very much for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! <3

[aightball]

It's over

[pimprevster]

Yes, yes, it is over. I'm not sure where else I could go in the story from here, so it must end. ; _

[aightball]

I understand about 'here it must end'. I have that all the time with my stuff =).

Some people don't describe characters or scenes very well, and I like how you described things for the reader. We weren't left to wonder what things looked like or if a character was angry, etc., you just described it perfectly and gave us a chance to envision things.

I actually turned a fanfic series original (it's not as easy as it sounds) and am preparing to start submitting it to agents, so it can be done. I used fanfic as a catapult for my own characters and it really, really helped. Take a jog around agentqueryconnect.com to see what's happening in the writing world. There are a lot of helpful fora on there as well.

I'd say if the epilogue ties it all together perfectly, no one has to explain anything =). Though amusing to see the others reactions, sometimes, less is more (as I'm learning at ACQ). I'd say write it out and whichever version ties it all up neatly is the one to go with!

[pimprevster]

Okay, I get it. Does that mean I had a decent balance of description as well as letting the reader's imagination flow?

I would love to do that with this story, but...they're both guys. And that's just not mainstream enough to be published (easily, anyway). xD I feel terrible for saying that, but it's true. I'm also not too fond of the very beginning, but I haven't thought of a better way to start it.

Thank you very much! I'll definitely check the site out and see what I can find to help me. :] I know about the whole 'less is more' thing, which is why I'm reluctant to write the explanation, but writing it out and seeing which version is better sounds like a good idea to me, so I'll probably do that. ^^

[khaoscore]

Lord knows I'm not offended that it was longer than the other chapters. It was the ending so it had to be longer. Of course you should do an epilogue. It will give you something write and me something to read. :)