Trinity
“I want to see him fuck you,” Cassie had said, and that was how it all began.
Or not. No, that can’t have been it. It began when she walked in on them, breathless and quivering with want and aggression, half-kissing and half-fighting in the Observation Room three months ago; it began the first time Mace and Capa fucked, half hate
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How you portrayed Mace and Capa is very in-character (for me anyway^^), I think they could work this way. I watched the movie a couple of times myself and I had the impression that they share a strong bond and the bios only mention that Mace dislikes Capa, which surely is not all there is.
Normally I don´t like threesomes, but this one is written very believable.
I hope there will be more soon!
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It's an excellent work. Very well written, the charactes are so real, so deep...
And not just the characters, one self can fell the strained atmosphere in the spaceship, the feeling of dying slowly...
You say that this story is "Porn with a (mini) plot"... but I see so many things there, so many feelings, so many thoughts, that this is not just porn!! THIS IS VERY GOOD PORN!! AND WITH A PLOT!!
The only thing that make me feel a little sad it's the buried bitterness that comes along with us in the story and burst in the end. I always feel that is necesary a little redemption, something that make us think that there's hope out there... But THAT is the power of your work. And you must be proud of it.
THANK YOU, THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!! YOU MAKE MY DAY!!!
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I really loved this comment because it's so perceptive and so useful--it's very nice, as a writer, to know exactly what you liked. The feeling of dying slowly is the most perfect way of saying exactly what I wanted to say, and I'm so glad that you felt it!
Thank you for the awesome comment,
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Great stuff - I'm going to have to thank you for contributing to making the world a better place. Because this certainly made *my* day. Week. Month.
Wonderfully written, too! Quite the gem. :)
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