Early Morning Departures

[musclemuseum29]

Title: Early Morning Departures
Author: mm29
Rating: medium 16?
Pairing: belldom
Summary: There's only so much that one can take.
Disclaimer: I own zilch.
*Warning:* Just language for the moment, though in future -if there is one for this- it will become more violent, dark and slashy.. .
Notes: A supermassive thank you to

Comments

[shakespeare]

You have a lovely, lovely way with words. This is so painful, but so honest. It's not a knee jerk reaction, I love how you can follow Matt's thought processes, and how you feel for both of them in different ways.

I really like this, even though it's made me feel really upset. *hugs* Thank you for sharing.

And I have to add, this

but the mornings after, those perfect, fragile, pastel swirls of coloured bliss

is beautiful.

[musclemuseum29]

Thank you so much :) Receiving such compliments from an accomplished writer of whom I admire and love very much means heaps *hugs back* so thank you again :)

[musclemuseum29]

*blushes* thank you! I was so antsy about posting and a little worried I'd receive no feedback, but your words made me positively glow :)
I'm really glad you liked it *head rolls* And Dom's only going to get worse before he gets better too :P (someone has to be the bastard of this r/ship and Drummer boy got stuck with it XD )

[dolce_piccante]

you did it! and holy hell, what a story this is! your writing is WONDERFUL and i feel so much for matt...you really did a fantastic job of explaining his emotions while also advancing the plot and filling the reader in on things from the past...this was unexpected (belldom stories are typically horny and blissful) but i can't wait to read more.

All I can think about is us and where we’re not heading. It’s not like I thought this would last forever; inevitably you’re going to have that desire of marriage and children again, and this time I won’t be able to talk you out of it. Eventually, you’re going to get sick of all this masquerading around and pretending we’re just best friends. You’re going to tire of the scepticism and prejudice we receive and those looks you can never quite ignore. I’d never stop you from what you want but I thought we had a little longer left, and I think the saddest thing is how none of that matters to me if I’m with you. If I can’t have children, and have to keep this secret and know that someone will

[musclemuseum29]

*falls over* wow..well you know I definitely couldn't have done this without you luv :) wonderful? Lol, thankyou! - though in comparison to your beautiful devine smut I can't say I agree, but thankyou:)
And dw, this will get more violent and rough; i just needed a set up for Dom's bastard ways-plus I do like sad storylines...it's the romantic sop in me that likes to shine through, the bastard of a thing that it is.
Thta paragprah too was my favourite :) I sort of wrote it based on what a friend told me about his love, and it always kind of stuck..
*hugs* You're still the best!

[dolce_piccante]

that's awfully sweet of you to say :) but i just helpe dyou with technical stuff..this story is all your brillian, my dear :D

ooo i'm so looking forward to the violent/rough/sad storyline...you wrote this chapter so well and you definitely set dom up well...that paragraph is just...gah...i reread it just now and it still is so emotion...i'm super pumped to see what's next :)

awww! you're too sweet! *hugs back*

[dutchweirdo]

Oh WOW. I really like this. You portraied Matt beautifully, even tho it's mostly Dom portraied that way.
Very well written, some beautiful lines in there.

Saying I love you wasn’t hard- though hearing you repeat these words to me was harder

I want to watch that familiar bright fire dance in your grey orbs when you see me.

I need to know that I mean something to you.

Like you do to me.

I especially like the fact that you've put these last two sentences in a paragraph of their own. I know it's a technique, but.....to choose the right sentences to use the technique with.....you know....it works.

Well done! Hope to read more of this soon.

[musclemuseum29]

*beams* I'm so glad you liked it :) And I know what you mean about the technique, if you break up the sentences too soon it ruins everything, and if you don't then you miss that heavy meaning- and I'm amazed you picked that up, I think I re-wrote it a dozen times because I was afraid that the break ruined it, so thank you :)
There's more bastard Dom to come :)

[purestarlove]

Wow! This was amazing. And you can tell you wrote it really well because I am hurting so much after reading it. Real pain! Bloody hell!
Beautiful writing resulting in my heart breaking!

[musclemuseum29]

*grins...smiles sheepishly* Well my intent worked :) *hugs* Knowing it affected you like you've written has really made my day -no, no, I'm not glad that you're hurting lol, I just mean that I know my emotions came across and that I wrote it at least well enough for that to happen. SO huge thank you and a matt kind of hug XD