It's 5AM in the bloody morning but I promised I'd post this DA fic today, so here it is! (though, technically it's tomorrow) It's longer than I'd planned, slightly more plot-y than I planned, but it's my first ever delve in the Dark Angel fandom so I wanted to experiment with voice and character a bit. I don't think the voices are quite up to par
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*bounces*
*squees again*
That was SO good! You have an incredible talent to get character's voices spot on - I could literally hear Original Cindy's and Max'S and of course Alec's voice in my head, so good :-)
And my very favourite paragraphs?
He didn’t see the fist coming, he just felt the impact, felt his head whip to the side and something crack inside him. Maybe it wasn’t a bone. Maybe it was something deeper. Because all he really knew was that he disappeared then. Vaguely he heard the sounds of flesh smacking flesh, of something wet splattering against the ground and of a knife trailing down skin, and maybe a scream. But only vaguely. And he couldn’t see or feel anything.
He’d already tried shuffling through his memories to find a safe place to hide, but nowhere was safe. So he just…disappeared.
That's just so well written from his POV, excellent.
Write more! More! :-)
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*fans you*
Well I do hope you're writing more! Hehe...I might write something, one day... I sort of had a seizure!fic plotbunny and yesterday while I was lying in my bed this line suddenly came to my mind, out of nothing: "Alec was sure Max had never forgiven him that he looked exactly like Ben." I'm a dork, ain't I? Maybe I'm going to make something out of that line - unless it's the most overused idea ever :p
I was too sissy to go for anything more violent or angsty, but one day...one day... ;)
I have good faith in you :-)
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That theme would make an interesting oneshot! Angsty or sweet or bittersweet! Go for it, I say =D
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He he did I ever tell you that you rock? 'Cause you really REALLY do!
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Fave bits:
“Why not try the honey approach. Just give it a go. See where it gets you." “Maybe I’ve been helping rich little old ladies across the street.” “You think about my ass a lot?” All great Alec snark and yes Alec, yes I do think about your ass a lot.
It pissed him off. He’d already given White the satisfaction of hearing him scream, he didn’t want him to think he’d been crying too. Oh how Alec.
And because it made me laugh out loud, the shout out to Logan's 'hideous painting'. HA HA!
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Yes, Alec, we're *all* thinking about your ass a lot.
So relieved you felt Alec and the others were in character. It's really hard to write them without turning them into stereotypes or caricatures of themselves. Especially after all the bad DA fic I've read. The fanon seems to have this whole different characterization going on that differs considerably from the canon. I tried to avoid that trap, lol. Normal was fun to write for.
Thanks for reading! =D
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Hehe, don't we all!
Really pleased you enjoyed! I'm so going to be dabbling in this fandom for a while. All of you should be too! =D
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