Fic: Dark Angel Oneshot
It's 5AM in the bloody morning but I promised I'd post this DA fic today, so here it is! (though, technically it's tomorrow) It's longer than I'd planned, slightly more plot-y than I planned, but it's my first ever delve in the Dark Angel fandom so I wanted to experiment with voice and character a bit. I don't think the voices are quite up to par
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*bounces*
*squees again*
That was SO good! You have an incredible talent to get character's voices spot on - I could literally hear Original Cindy's and Max'S and of course Alec's voice in my head, so good :-)
And my very favourite paragraphs?
He didn’t see the fist coming, he just felt the impact, felt his head whip to the side and something crack inside him. Maybe it wasn’t a bone. Maybe it was something deeper. Because all he really knew was that he disappeared then. Vaguely he heard the sounds of flesh smacking flesh, of something wet splattering against the ground and of a knife trailing down skin, and maybe a scream. But only vaguely. And he couldn’t see or feel anything.
He’d already tried shuffling through his memories to find a safe place to hide, but nowhere was safe. So he just…disappeared.
That's just so well written from his POV, excellent.
Write more! More! :-)
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*fans you*
Well I do hope you're writing more! Hehe...I might write something, one day... I sort of had a seizure!fic plotbunny and yesterday while I was lying in my bed this line suddenly came to my mind, out of nothing: "Alec was sure Max had never forgiven him that he looked exactly like Ben." I'm a dork, ain't I? Maybe I'm going to make something out of that line - unless it's the most overused idea ever :p
I was too sissy to go for anything more violent or angsty, but one day...one day... ;)
I have good faith in you :-)
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That theme would make an interesting oneshot! Angsty or sweet or bittersweet! Go for it, I say =D
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