Title: Serpents (Prologue/?)
Author:
MrsTaterRating & Warnings: R for sexuality
Prompts: weakness; "In the light of Voldemort's return, we are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided."
Word Count: 5241
Summary: Two years into a relationship with Remus, and the correct way to deal with full moons continues to elude Tonks,
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And I definitely pick the last Remus :].
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Thank you so much for your lovely words. This is an unconventional era in which to write R/T stories, so I'm doing my best to keep it plausible even if it's not the likliest of scenarios. I'm just thrilled you think it all fits in the HP world, and that Des matches as a character, too. That's the trick to OCs, making them blend in, and I don't have much experience with them, so I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback!
Again, I'm so pleased you like the start of this, and I hope you continue to like how the story unfolds. Thank you for reading and commenting!
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I love the time/setting of this piece, that it borrows canon details (Tonks nearly failing Stealth and Tracking).
I agree with cae_prince that you did an excellent job of portraying all characters feelings in this though it's Tonks' pov we read. The description of Remus' character after the 'effing furious' bit exhibits his persona so wonderful. Well done.
Can't wait for the next part. Keep up the great work.
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I really appreciate your words about the characterizations and emotions coming through apart from the POV character. In this I was really hoping that Remus' hurt came through even though Tonks was wrapped up in herself, so it's good to know you could feel his pain through little physical descriptions and his dialogue.
I'll try to get the next part up ASAP. Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback!
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Oh, and am I the only one who now wants a pyjama reading "Save a broom; ride a Quidditch player." ?
:-)
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I'll try and update in a couple days!
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I like the character of Des, too - the conversation at the start is a good insight onto Tonks's thoughts and emotions, but Des is interesting in herself as well. And the bit at the end about sleepng with a werewolf is just right to end it - Tonks's trying to make a joke of it empahasives her emotions a lot. (and that's not exactly what I wanted to say, but I can't find quite the right words)
Oh, and I loved the bit with the Map. Especially Mr. Padfoot XD
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