Demon's Lexicon, chapter one

[lettered]

For anyone who didn't see, the first chapter of SRB's book is now public, here.

Thoughts?

Comments

[anywherebeyond]

Nick/Jamie FTW!!!!!!

[orexisbella]

Alan/Jamie! :D

[wingstodust]

... Alan/Nick/Jamie? *shifts eyes*

[lettered]

...everyone/ravens?

[scrtkpr]

I think it's awesome, and I'm desperate to read more, and I agree with you on just about everything you said, and I will write more when I have something other than my phone to type on.

[betelin_notecor]

OMG, I loved, loved, loved it sooo much! XD

But especially Nick and Alan. Nick's all rough and tough, but he's so sweet and protective over Alan. SO CUTE! XD And Alan's all adorable with his limp and gun and bookshop-ness!

But I wish they weren't brothers so I could slash them... sorry, Sarah! XD But you know us crazy fandomers... we are weird. And Nick's almost jealousy over Mae is adorable! I really, really, really wish they weren't brothers. =/

Do you think one could be adopted? XD

(And, lol, I know I'm a weirdo, but don't kill me, please?)

[lettered]

I love that they're brothers. They would not have the same relationship were they not related. Even if one was adopted, they'd still feel about each other the way brothers do, and I really like to see people care about each other that obviously bonded in childhood, and have it not be about anything more complex than that.

That said, you know what they say about some families...

[betelin_notecor]

Sigh, I know it would be a different relationship and it would ruin everything, but I'd feel less guilty about wanting to slash them if they weren't related. XD

I'll just have to get over it between now and June! =P I'm positive I'll love the book for exactly what it is though. :)

[wingstodust]

Oh man, I was so scared about liking this when I opened up the link to the first chapter... 'cause it'll just make the wait a MILLION TIMES WORSE, you know? *dies* But I read it, and yes, some thoughts

[lettered]

I need to have a feel for where the plot is going for me to nod and say 'Yes, I'm positive I'm gonna like this,

Well yes, me too. Many books I really like I feel that way about (there's only about 3 books I've read where I knew I was going to like them within the first page, and they're not even necessarily my favorite books. Incidentally, one of them was Catcher in the Rye). But SRB does have a habit of delivering.

'warm as a whispered secret', while it's very distinct Maya voice, somehow sounded kind of off there.

I agree. I took me out.

the mother is coming off as irresponsible and selfish

Sarah did say many think her mother is one of the villains. It's alright if she's not supposed to be sympathetic to me. (For instance, I like Narcissa, though I wouldn't wanna hang out and get sandwiches or anything.)

I still dunno what to think of Mae

Feel the same, but of course, there's only so much room in a first chapter.

I just haven't fallen in love yet, that's all. I think that is very understandable! I think I've fallen

[wingstodust]

lol, now that I think about it, it's true that most books I read take one or two chapters before I know I love it... With a couple exceptions of course. (Unless the very premise itself has snagged me, then that's a totally different story

[essie007]

You know what first struck me about this. The grammar. It all in perfectly grammatically constructed sentences, all amproximately the same length. I assume this is becaus it went through about a million rounds of professional editing. I'm not sure weather I like this or not, because all that descriptive "filler" that comes from a nice SRB run-on is gone. The rhythm and significance of a well placed fragment? No more. So there's a richness that's missing. On the other hand, it makes the whole story much easier to read. The action is not convoluted at all, the way it often is in her fics

[lettered]

I'm not sure weather I like this or not, because all that descriptive "filler" that comes from a nice SRB run-on is gone. I know what you mean. Sarah says she tries a lot harder on original fic than fanfic, and when I started reading the chapter, I thought, "Does trying harder mean neat and tidy sentences? Because I like the crazy ones!" There were some instance in the fanfic whee I would look at a sentence and say, "This is technically a very bad sentence. Shame on it. It is poorly paced and dumps out info bam!bam!bam. There should be nothing redeeming in it"--and I would *love* that sentence, because it was all hanging out there, crazy and all, like the fics themselves, which sort of rushed at you with a kind of force towards finish. Sometimes brain-pouring is more charming than actual craft, I think--though SRB's one of the few, possibly the only one whose writing has made me feel that way

[blackbird0414]

I am so glad you said you saw Nick/Mae because, seriously, I don't usually do the whole shipping thing, but I totally saw that! And I think Mum/evilcrazy magician from her past would be totally awesome to read. In a doomed, scary, and/or possibly hilarious type of way.
Is it a horribly bad thing that I've only read the first chapter of this book and I'm already kind of getting an itch to write a little story in it? Not that I will, because I swore I wouldn't write anything at all until I finished writing all these papers for school, and it's not like I know even half enough about this world to even really begin, but still!

Let's just sleep until June!

[lokifan]

How about Mum/evilcrazy magican from her past? No?

Evilcrazymagician = Babydaddy. I BETCHA.

And yes, Nick/Mae would be awesome! Maybe Alan/Jamie because they're my favourites so far. Alan/Mae though, how incredibly cute!

DEAR GOD THE URGE TO SHIP. JULY IS GOING TO BE A CRAZY PILE OF SRB!FIC.