I'm not sure weather I like this or not, because all that descriptive "filler" that comes from a nice SRB run-on is gone.
I know what you mean. Sarah says she tries a lot harder on original fic than fanfic, and when I started reading the chapter, I thought, "Does trying harder mean neat and tidy sentences? Because I like the crazy ones!" There were some instance in the fanfic whee I would look at a sentence and say, "This is technically a very bad sentence. Shame on it. It is poorly paced and dumps out info bam!bam!bam. There should be nothing redeeming in it"--and I would *love* that sentence, because it was all hanging out there, crazy and all, like the fics themselves, which sort of rushed at you with a kind of force towards finish. Sometimes brain-pouring is more charming than actual craft, I think--though SRB's one of the few, possibly the only one whose writing has made me feel that way.
But I do think that the beginning of a story should be very neat. I've said before I didn't appreciate mistful's fics right away, and part of it was probably because they started right in--sort of babbley. And I don't know if you've heard me say it before, but I tried kita0610's fics four or five times--Losing My Religion I literally started 3 times--and hated it, because there were fragments in the beginning. And Kita's possibly the only other fannish author whose published work I would love more than her fanfic; she's that good.
So, I mean, because judgmental idjits like me exist in the world, I guess it's good to start out slow. I'm hoping to get a little more into the style we know and love later on. Especially the fragmants, which I think are generally more accepted in professional fiction than the run-ons. I'm also hoping that the action and pacing will be a little bit more--well, convoluted, as you say. Though again, in fics might have been just a result of her needing to get it all out there without being as concerned about how it came out.
I'm very interested in the mother! I especially loved how you could feel her presence there so heavy, with the creaks in the floor, when she wasn't actually present. Nice stuff.
I know what you mean. Sarah says she tries a lot harder on original fic than fanfic, and when I started reading the chapter, I thought, "Does trying harder mean neat and tidy sentences? Because I like the crazy ones!" There were some instance in the fanfic whee I would look at a sentence and say, "This is technically a very bad sentence. Shame on it. It is poorly paced and dumps out info bam!bam!bam. There should be nothing redeeming in it"--and I would *love* that sentence, because it was all hanging out there, crazy and all, like the fics themselves, which sort of rushed at you with a kind of force towards finish. Sometimes brain-pouring is more charming than actual craft, I think--though SRB's one of the few, possibly the only one whose writing has made me feel that way.
But I do think that the beginning of a story should be very neat. I've said before I didn't appreciate mistful's fics right away, and part of it was probably because they started right in--sort of babbley. And I don't know if you've heard me say it before, but I tried kita0610's fics four or five times--Losing My Religion I literally started 3 times--and hated it, because there were fragments in the beginning. And Kita's possibly the only other fannish author whose published work I would love more than her fanfic; she's that good.
So, I mean, because judgmental idjits like me exist in the world, I guess it's good to start out slow. I'm hoping to get a little more into the style we know and love later on. Especially the fragmants, which I think are generally more accepted in professional fiction than the run-ons. I'm also hoping that the action and pacing will be a little bit more--well, convoluted, as you say. Though again, in fics might have been just a result of her needing to get it all out there without being as concerned about how it came out.
I'm very interested in the mother! I especially loved how you could feel her presence there so heavy, with the creaks in the floor, when she wasn't actually present. Nice stuff.
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