The Milky Way: Rachel, PG

[marliskelsey]

Title: The Milky Way
Author: marliskelsey
Pairing,Character(s): Rachel, appearances from Finn, Puck and Quinn, tiny hints of Rachel/Finn and Rachel/Puck
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1,176
Spoilers: Through 1x13, Sectionals
Disclaimer: I do not own Glee. I can only dream.
Summary: Somewhere in between being born and receiving her very first pair of shiny

Comments

[marliskelsey]

Thank you so much :)

I adore Rachel too. You know she's been ambitious since birth, aha. It kills me though that people are so awful to her when all she's doing is trying to be who she is. And, granted, sometimes she goes about it strangely, but she tries.

But I'm so glad you read and enjoyed this, thanks for commenting ♥

[smc_27]

Nobody wants to hang out with that freaky Rachel girl, who smiles too wide and talks far too much, and who sings too beautifully to look away.

This was amazing if for nothing more than that one line. Amazing.

But yeah, it was amazing for a whole lot of other reasons too. I really, really loved this.

[marliskelsey]

Oh goodness, you're making me blush ♥

I'm really glad you liked it, I'm pretty fond of it too. So thank you very much for reading and commenting, you have no idea how much it means :)

[becca_radcgg]

First off, I have the attention span of a four year old, so I really appreciated all the short concise segments. You paint a very vivid picture with few words and that's really quite rare to find.

I really enjoyed the fact that you looked at Rachel's upbringing and decided that to her three or four year old self (or whenever she had that ephiphany) she only really wanted to make her dads proud of her. I believe that's very important to her still.

I loved the entire segment with the dress and the complete despondence of her lack of friends. There's just something so morose about her social ineptitude... or inability. You really capture that with simple clean lines like, "Nobody comes to her birthday party." and "Her second day, Rachel discovers how flavoured syrup feels when it’s burning in your eyes."

There was one teeny tiny thing I found, "For oncethere’s no glint in his eye" - you just need to add a space between those two words.

I was rec'd this by my friend alifab who is, of course, fabulous, and a real Finn/Rachel shipper.

[marliskelsey]

Thank you very, very much. You have no idea how excited I was when I noticed that you'd commented, because I've admired your work since I was just a Glee fanfiction lurker. Three of my favourite writers commented this, actually, it's a good day :)

I'm glad you liked the short segments, that's my typical writing style but I always worry they're too short.

I think that quite a bit of Rachel's driving force is the need for others (especially people she cares about) to be proud of her and to like her.

The way others treat her makes me so sad, because I think that maybe she never learned how to interact with people, or what other people consider pleasant because she's always been so focused on her other pursuits.

I fixed the mistake, thanks for pointing it out!

is fabulous.

I'm so glad that you liked it. Thank you for reading and commenting.

♥

[fuzzy_paint]

Wow. This is beautiful. It really tugs on the heartstrings because Rachel just wants everything so, so much. You did an awesome job getting that across.

I love the contrast between the Rachel POV (she uses so many words) and the starkness of this story. It really drives home the quiet angst (or maybe it's not so quiet) of being Rachel Berry - destined for stardom, but so, so lonely.

Things I loved in particular:

- Unconsciously, her hand drifts to the screen, hovering, so that the static crackles against her fingers. She imagines it as invisible waves of understanding to her from this beautiful, talented, captivating woman, telling her that she belongs when everyone tells her she doesn’t. This is just so beautiful.

-And he’s hard to forget about, all sweet eyes and dark hair and general bigness. I love this description of Finn. It rings really true for me.

-The entire last section. Gave me chills, bb.

This was wonderful! Thank you.

[marliskelsey]

Thank you so much! I'm glad that came across for you, because during the P/R scene on the bleachers in Mash Up it came across to me as really very poignant when Rachel was talking about that.

It's lonely at the top. Poor Rachel knows it better than anybody.

I'm so glad you enjoyed, makes me feel all warm and fuzzy ;) Thanks for reading and commenting.