Put my enemies to sleep (3/3)

Nov 20, 2008 02:55

Notes - Part One - Part Two - Part Three

3/3 )

brendon/ryan, nc-17

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softlyforgotten November 20 2008, 14:58:11 UTC
ah, ah, darling, this has killed me dead. i have commentary for the first two thirds but not really the last, and it’s 1.30 in the morning (i’m an idiot), so let me just say the way you finish things in this is brilliant and i love the way things aren’t solved but they aren’t wrong, either.

anyway, this felt so very real to me, from the very beginning; just, the tiredness - the feeling of unease that creeps up with Brendon, not sure whether something’s really wrong but aching for him all the same. it’s so hard to write that era without over-dramatising it into the poor-little-Brendon approach but you make him into this brilliantly irritable kid who’s still trying so hard. ilhim. and then how that same exhausted unease sort of transfers to pete, this weird twisty feeling in your gut. and how it comes back and back with "I don't get it either, but I think he really believes it," and i was on edge, constantly waiting for something to explain it. and then fuck, when ryan pulls: You said, and I quote, word for word -- akjsghksg, JESUS. ( ... )

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theaerosolkid November 30 2008, 01:05:22 UTC
Here is where I confess that, secretly, I love your feedback best. ♥

I'm so glad you liked this, seriously. This story has been my baby for something like a year now.

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fallintosilence November 20 2008, 22:23:17 UTC
I should really wait until my brain un-melts before I try to comment on this, but I have to first say that I'm really glad that I'm a clueless badfriend because I knew you were writing something long and amazing but I had no idea what it was about. And again, I'm really happy that I didn't because the suspense and the surprise just completely floored me. I am pretty sure that at the end of part 2 I couldn't have gotten my jaw to shut for anything.

And oh, this story. *__* The Brendon characterization and POV is just so painfully real to me, the way it takes you through the band's history like it does, with Brendon tired and overwhelmed and trying to hold himself (and Ryan, and the band) together. He's just a kid but he tries so hard and ugh. Brendon. It's crazy thinking back on earlier scenes after I know the end, too. (This calls for a re-read!)

What else can I comment on? I loved the pacing of this, the slow coming together of Brendon and Ryan (because Brendon =/= Tyler in my mind, so there) and just the tenderness between them, ( ... )

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theaerosolkid November 30 2008, 01:06:24 UTC
Thank you so much, darling! In my mind, too, Brendon =/= Tyler. And oh, yes, there will be threesomey porn. >:D

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liketheroad November 20 2008, 23:38:36 UTC
Oh my god, that was unspeakably incredible. I was stunned and amazed and heartbroken and delighted so many times over, you are a legend of our time!

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theaerosolkid November 30 2008, 01:06:35 UTC
Thank you so very much! :D

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vanitylove_xx November 20 2008, 23:55:23 UTC
Well, hello there person who I do not know but writes incredibly amazing fic. :D

Okay, so I've been sitting here for the past half hour trying to come with a half decent comment to leave, but reading this has robbed me of all coherent thought.

This was just beautiful, and I barely breathed while reading my way through this. I got so wrapped up in it! I felt so exhausted, right along with Brendon; everything that he went through, it was as though I was there with him for the ride. When Brendon was feeling confused, the scenes with Brent!

Now, knowing how it ends, I can go back and point out where exactly Tyler slowly started pushing Brent away from the group; how you can feel Brent's annoyance with Brendon right from there.

Tyler could have easily been a sort of comic-relief character, could have made this into a crack-fic of sorts, but instead, you made it feel so real and painful, and into something else entirely. Just ( ... )

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theaerosolkid November 30 2008, 01:07:00 UTC
Hello back! :)

Thank you so very, very much! I'm glad you liked it.

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disarm_d November 21 2008, 00:44:39 UTC
Yaaay! Story!

I thought the writing in this was really excellent. The way you handled moving through so many years. The tone was really great. Brendon's constant exhaustion worked to set the mood, and there was that slightly dream-like quality that helped to ease us in to the right frame of mind for the big twist.

I was skimming through the comments on the notes section, and I read something about Brendon having sex with himself, which gave away the twist, so unfortunately I did know it going in to read the story. It was still really awesome when it happened. Brendon and Tyler together were amazing. I'd read a little, and then look away from the computer screen and try to imagine two Brendon's kissing, and yeah. Yup. That was really awesome every single time.

I think this: "I got it," Tyler said, reaching for Brendon's Sidekick. Brendon dropped his bag on the floor and flopped back on the bed, butting his head up against Tyler's hip, looking for attention. Tyler set the Sidekick aside and reached down to ruffle Brendon's ( ... )

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theaerosolkid November 30 2008, 01:07:40 UTC
Yay story indeed!

Dude, Brendon cuddling with himself, oh my God, I need that in my life. ;___; Dear scientists of the world, get to work on cloning, asap.

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