He's There - Chapter 52

Dec 02, 2013 19:20

Wow... what do I even say when I post the final chapter of the novel I've been working on for six years? Do I look back on all of my experiences writing it and the most important events that inspired parts of the story? I'd like to, but for tonight I need to give this to you and move on to the homework I neglected during this fit of passion. I had ( Read more... )

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Yes. savoreachsense December 3 2013, 06:32:32 UTC
Oh. Em. Gee.

That was amazing.

I... Am finding myself at a loss for words.

Time to digest, be back tomorrow with constructive criticism.

Bravo!

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Re: Yes. ladybows_fs December 3 2013, 07:31:37 UTC

Constructive criticism savoreachsense December 3 2013, 20:57:52 UTC
I think you've wrapped up HT wonderfully with this chapter. I think I've read it about 5 times now, and I always notice something that I didn't quite soak up the previous times ( ... )

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Re: Constructive criticism ladybows_fs December 7 2013, 02:11:01 UTC
Hey, Kate. :)

You've read it 5 times? No wayyy~! What a dedicated reader I have in you. Ugh, I'm glad someone thinks it wrapped up well. I still am conflicted over what kind of job I did for "Erik". Lily's story is wrapped up, but "Erik"'s...? Thanks, though.

Let me go down the line in response to the CC:
That scene you mentioned is Lily and Mariam talking in her car. I should have made that clearer, and I totally knew I was putting in similar imagery, I just went for it anyway because I was attached to the imagery.

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"As of recent" and "until recent" I believe are grammatically correct phrases. In cases where something happened, describing it as recent would require the word "recently" since it is an adverb, but as a word describing the recent past, a noun, I think "recent" covers it.
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I'm sorry - I thought it was clear since the paragraph about her playing Michael Crawford OST tapes was just a couple ones before that. Also, LJ took off my italics for the song lyrics Lily repeats in her head after that sentence. Close ( ... )

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P.S. savoreachsense December 6 2013, 02:20:07 UTC
P.S. Dragonfly is an awesome song and the video is surreal. I've never heard anything like it before. Thanks for sharing it!

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