He's There - Chapter 52
Wow... what do I even say when I post the final chapter of the novel I've been working on for six years? Do I look back on all of my experiences writing it and the most important events that inspired parts of the story? I'd like to, but for tonight I need to give this to you and move on to the homework I neglected during this fit of passion. I had
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You've read it 5 times? No wayyy~! What a dedicated reader I have in you. Ugh, I'm glad someone thinks it wrapped up well. I still am conflicted over what kind of job I did for "Erik". Lily's story is wrapped up, but "Erik"'s...? Thanks, though.
Let me go down the line in response to the CC:
That scene you mentioned is Lily and Mariam talking in her car. I should have made that clearer, and I totally knew I was putting in similar imagery, I just went for it anyway because I was attached to the imagery.
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"As of recent" and "until recent" I believe are grammatically correct phrases. In cases where something happened, describing it as recent would require the word "recently" since it is an adverb, but as a word describing the recent past, a noun, I think "recent" covers it.
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I'm sorry - I thought it was clear since the paragraph about her playing Michael Crawford OST tapes was just a couple ones before that. Also, LJ took off my italics for the song lyrics Lily repeats in her head after that sentence. Close your eyes, for your eyes will only tell the truth~
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Those are intentional gaps. I have a lot of those throughout the whole story to waste paper upon publication-- I mean, to connote a significant pause in thought or action/dialogue.
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Yes, "ever" should be "never"!
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Really, constructive criticism could be criticism or conventions OR it could be telling me an entire scene seemed useless, or that some aspect of wrapping everything up felt missing to you, etc etc. I'm welcoming you to be totally honest about whether or not everything is effective. It won't hurt my feelings. :)
Anyway, hey, no sadness necessary! After the new year, I need to rewrite from the very beginning and that shall be very different given what I now know. I'm going to need people like you who are so familiar with everything to let me know everything is coming full circle and still the story you appreciated the first time around (while being hopefully 10x better.)
I'm so happy I could introduce you to My Brightest Diamond! If need be, I'll post a whole bunch of her work here. I think I'm seriously using six songs now that are all beautiful and have inspired all kinds of things. ♥
Again, thank you very much!
-J
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