Always or Never (P, 1)

[bibbity]

Title: Always or Never (Prologue and Chapter One)
Rating: Eventual NC-17
Pairing(s): YuuRam, some hints at ConYuu, not seen OMC/Wolfram
Summary: The best-laid plans of mice and men often go awry.

A/N: The majority of the spellings and phrases I've taken from the AonE dub. I tried to be consistent more than accurate, but if there's a horrendous

Comments

[bibbity]

and Wolfram could feel it sinking threw his own uniform
Did you mean "sinking through"?

:O! I don't know what you're talking about, crazy lady, it looks fine to me.. ^^;

Hn? I always believed the extra e was for the person who was purposed to . . . *looks it up* Curses. I am very wrong. *Fixes*

Hee! Thank you for the canon comment, I was trying really hard for that feeling. ^__^

[prongsy]

No, Maaya1x2 were right (unless, of course, you two are being sarcastic... sarcasm is rather hard to tell online)...

Anyway, you put "threw" as in past tense of the verb "to throw", which is what Yuuri does with a baseball. And Maaya1x2 is right in that it should be "through" as in the preposition. It was sinking "through" somehing. You can't sink "threw"... unless somehow something sinks through the trajectory of a throw... no, still "through".... gah headache! o.O

*retreats back to grammar nazi land*

[melodi_chan]

This is a good story^_^ Can't wait til the next chapter!!! Yuuri can be such a dolt-_-

[bibbity]

A lovable dolt, but definitely a dolt. ^^

Thanks! The next part will be posted sometime tomorrow. ^_____^

[melodi_chan]

Yay!!!^_^ I can't wait. I agree, a loveable dolt he is^_^

[galerian_ash]

Ooooo, this is very promising! I really like the idea behind this, and you did a great job capturing everyone's characters.

The only thing that I find a bit off is the fact that Conrad seems to be under the impression that Wolfram went along with everyone else on the first boat. He just doesn't strike me as someone who wouldn't have a perfect check on something so important. But then again, maybe there's a reason for it that will be explained in an upcoming chapter, so just ignore me *sheepish grin*

Oh, and the line "Morgif gestured frantically toward the other bed with his lips." totally cracked me up! XD

Looking forward to reading the next chapter~

[galerian_ash]

Ooops, forgot to mention that I especially liked the dream sequence! It felt very bittersweet and ultimately eerie, and I really felt for Wolfram and his decision to enjoy the dream to its depressing end (that reminded me of myself, to be honest).

[bibbity]

I almost didn't include that, but I liked it too much to delete. ^^; Plus we get a little bit more of Wolfram's POV which I like writing more than Yuuri's. ^^

[bibbity]

Thank you so much!

Hee . . . ^^;; The mix up will get touched on again, but not very thoroughly.

Man, I was laughing when I wrote that, I was hoping someone else would notice it, too! ^_____^

Tomorrow! :3

[shaorankun]

AHHHH WOLFRAM!!
;_;

*pokes yuuri on the forehead* o_O

nice ficcy~

[bibbity]

Thank you! ^__^

[shinineko1]

o.o; he's not..going to find the message??? NANI!? You have to be joking!! Leaving Wolf all tied up there and with whatever happening to him *SOB*

[bibbity]

Poor Wolfram, yeah? And it's a three day trip from Purgo, so that'll be six days before they can do anything about it . . .

[shinineko1]

You...that's just.... HIDOI!!! T_____T

...

Then again. It's probably exactly what I would do *shrug* so keep up the good work! XD

[bibbity]

Hee, there's method to my madness. :3