Wait

[just_being_me08]

Title: Wait

Rating: 15

Fandom: Assassin’s Creed

Pairing: Shaun/Desmond

Summary: Shaun doesn’t need anyone. But if he ever did need anyone at all, then it would be Desmond.

Disclaimer: Everything belongs to Ubisoft and not me. Please don’t sue, my student loan won’t cover it. Lyrics belong to Earshot.

Author’s Notes: So I’m venturing out

Comments

[assassin_lucy]

I'm always a bit hesitant to look at Shaun/Desmond, just because Desmond seems so mediocre to me whereas I just adore Shaun. But I particularly liked Shaun's reaction to failure, because I get the feeling he really would blame himself. The smile at the end was lovely.

[just_being_me08]

Ok, so I'm blaming university, but I am sooo sorry that I havent replied to this sooner!!

Eitherway thank you so much for leaving me such an awesome comment, it really is greatly appreciated. :) And also, its great to hear that people love Shaun too, I think as a character he is just too adorable. And hilarious to write. So thank you!

[just_being_me08]

Also, I love your icon. <3

[assassin_lucy]

Don't worry, uni can be a bitch especially if you have exams in two weeks like me but still can't bring yourself to study.

It's a great fic with a brilliant Shaun.

[kai19999]

“Fuck…” Desmond was instantly sitting beside him, reaching out and carefully taking the damaged hand, examining it gently. “I did this to you?”
“No Desmond. I just thought it would be fun to hit my knuckles and see what happened…” Shaun spat, although he made no attempts to take back his hand.

I laughed outloud at that bit. Very Shaun/Desmond-ish. Anyways, I simply loved this fanfic. It does justice to my OTP and this is definately, I'm not being a suck up here!, seriously one of the best oneshots on them I've read. I love your style. Do you have a fanfiction.net account, or anything else (:

[just_being_me08]

Apologies for being so late replying here, its not that I don't appreciate your feedback in the slightest! But thank you so much! I'm really glad that I was able to make you laugh, and I'm definitely glad that I managed to do your OTP justice too. That is such a compliment, and your entire comment is so lovely about my writing! I do have a fanfiction.net account, but I've been too scared to use it yet...I'm branching out into a new fandom and it terrifies me lol. But I have an unfinished Ezio/Altair, and another Shaun/Desmond waiting in the wings... I take it you use fanfiction.net then?

Thanks again for the awesome comment! :)

[espadas]

I just need to say that I loved your characterization. It was interesting to see Shaun from this point of view - not only the "asshole" he pretends to be in the game, but a little deeper. I really liked his reaction to the failure. Your Desmond was also really well-written and interesting, and their conversations were just perfectly in character.

I loved it :)

[just_being_me08]

Thank you so so much! And I'm really sorry that I've been so slow to say that to you too.

It means so much that my characterisation of Shaun worked, since I was conscious of maybe over exploring the character and being OC. I'm just so flattered really, your comment definitely has made me smile. :)

Thanks again!

Feedback

[yumearashi]

Welcome to the fandom! This was quite good - I'm guessing not your first piece of writing. I liked Shaun's characterization particularly. I can imagine that he's a person who never likes feeling weak, even though he uses his appearance to make people underestimate him. And I agree that he would take his responsibilities quite seriously (that high degree of perfectionism, never letting up until he's 100% satisfied), and be very hard on himself for any fatalities that happened on his watch

Re: Feedback

[just_being_me08]

Wow...first off can I just say thank you so much for the time you put into this comment! I assure you the time its taken me to reply doesn't reflect what it means to me. I really do appreciate the constructive criticism

Re: Feedback

[yumearashi]

You are very welcome! Thank you for taking the concrit well - even when there's a specific request for it, I'm always a little worried that the recipient will get defensive ^.^;

I wouldn't feel bad about the experimental grammar ^o^ Grammar and spelling are things that anyone can improve. What makes a good writer is a real understanding of the characters and a desire to improve, and they can't be learned; a writer either has them or doesn't. You have both in spades, so I tip my hat to you ^o^ I hope to see more of your work in the future ^__^

[bionic]

This was great, I really enjoyed reading it!

[just_being_me08]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it! :)