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Fic: Syncopation Chapter 5/6

Jan 02, 2007 11:03

Title: Syncopation: Chapter Five (of Six)
Pairing: Clark/Bruce
Disclaimer: The boys belong to DC and to each other, but not to me.
Series Notes: Syncopation is part of The Music of the Spheres, a combined Superman Returns/Batman Begins series. The whole series can be found here.
Rating: PG
Summary: Batman searches for the missing Harvey Dent ( Read more... )

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Comments 51

goldenrat84 January 2 2007, 02:27:18 UTC

This is the chapter is the first time I felt sympathy towards Harvey and even some small empathy for the 'Two Face' side of him. Poor Bruce.
Though, it looks like he did end up getting the un-spoken respect of Gorden out of this fiasco.
Thinking about it, movie'verse Batman has way more people who knows his secret identity then movie'verse Superman.

toketsupuurin January 2 2007, 02:58:09 UTC

yeah, he's not too good at keeping the secret is he?

jij January 2 2007, 16:48:39 UTC

LOL. I suppose Rachel is an old friend but still, I was kind of shocked. "You don't respect me? Well...I'm Batman! So there!" :)

jij January 2 2007, 16:45:45 UTC

Thinking about it, movie'verse Batman has way more people who knows his secret identity then movie'verse Superman.

Superman is incredibly tight with his secret identity in the movies. And Batman is actually unusually lax--Alfred, Lucius, and Rachel in one movie!

Glad this one worked for you and thanks for the feedback!

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jij January 2 2007, 16:50:14 UTC

poor Bruce, you can practically watch the scars grow atop the other scars.

Ow, what an image. :( Poor Bruce indeed! I'm glad you're liking this...it's been a while since I've had a secondary character with as much screen time as Harv and I'm never as comfortable once I wander off the big Two. :)

batfan_sarah January 2 2007, 04:47:53 UTC

"Bruce Wayne watched as they tore down the last safe place in the world."

oh my god.

this chapter was just so touching and tragic, but of course beutifully written.

as usual, great characterization and plot development, and i can't stand how great your harvey and bruce voices are here. oh, and jim! can't forget jim!

bottom line: love it. So very very much.

jij January 2 2007, 16:52:25 UTC

Thank you! Angstier than my usual style so I'm gratified it works for you. :)

I love jim. I could probably write a whole fic of Jim Gordon sitting in a chair and brooding. He'd do it so poetically. :)

batfan_sarah January 3 2007, 04:55:27 UTC

"I could probably write a whole fic of Jim Gordon sitting in a chair and brooding. He'd do it so poetically."

haha, you probably could. i'd certainly enjoy it.

on that note...is it really wrong to like bruce/jim...? i think on some level it is, but there's just something so sweet and sad about it...i dunno.

anyway, er, yeah. i'm gonna go now. good job.

jij January 4 2007, 01:08:35 UTC

on that note...is it really wrong to like bruce/jim...? i think on some level it is, but there's just something so sweet and sad about it...i dunno.

God, think of the identity porn though! Jim and Bruce can finish having hot sex in which Bruce delicately shifts between the playboy and his realler self, and then Jim goes off to work and meets Batman on the rooftop...and they both know he probably knows it's his lover but he isn't sure and doesn't really want to know...

I don't know why more people don't write Bruce/Jim. I find it quite tempting.

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schala_kid January 2 2007, 04:52:12 UTC

I'll begin by saying that I like how you went into detail with Harvey's scarred face, it gave me this horrible visual in my mind and I felt so bad for both Bruce and Harvey.

Also the convo between Harvey and the Vigilante is very well written and entertaining, these two probably have the best dialogue in this chapter.

And Clark, it must be frustrating for him having all those powers and he can't really help Bruce, or Harvey for that matter eh?

jij January 2 2007, 16:54:32 UTC

these two probably have the best dialogue in this chapter.

They certainly do! They really stole the scene for me. I had to gag Batman because whenever he tried to interrupt them the scene dragged awfully...I had to just let them go. ;)

And Clark, it must be frustrating for him having all those powers and he can't really help Bruce, or Harvey for that matter eh?

And yeah, poor Clark, he can move mountains but sometimes it's just not enough. :(

Thanks for the feedback!

vespa331 January 2 2007, 06:45:54 UTC

This was incredible, this was heart-aching. The respect from Gordon, the pride of the Bat, Harvey's interest in the duality of Batman, Harvey's freedom and its cost, "Bruce Wayne watched as they tore down the last safe place in the world."

jij January 3 2007, 00:04:58 UTC

Harvey's freedom and its cost

That's a wonderful way of putting it, thank you! *grins* That's almost exactly the idea I was hoping to get across, and you got it before I made it explicit in the next chapter! Woot!

Thanks so much, you make my day...