Week 2 entry for Brigits_Flame--"Fuel"

[intermezzo_poet]

 

Comments

[taste_is_sweet]

This is lovely. The melancholy and palpable guilt and sympathy of this is really well done. Thank you.

[intermezzo_poet]

Thank you so much! :) That means a lot, coming from you!

[mermaidbia]

I like the recursive nature of this piece, how you brought the cookies back to make the reader come full-circle and understand what's going on. Very nicely worded, too. Good job.

[intermezzo_poet]

Thank youuuu! :)

[pipisafoat]

I don't really know what I can say that they haven't already, but...

I love the repetition of short sentences and fragments to bring the feelings home. That's the single most powerful part of this story, to me.

[intermezzo_poet]

Thank you! It's good to know that somebody actually likes the repetition. :P

[orientalblossom]

I love the eloquence of your language, it's very beautiful. The little things like the sticky notes on mirrors make your story very realistic, and very endearing. Thank you for a great read!

[intermezzo_poet]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! :)

Editor 1

[amri]

Hi