Boy Love 4

[imladra]

Title: Boy Love 4
Series: Bleach
Pairing/Characters: Abarai Renji, Urahara Kisuke, Kurosaki Ichigo, Ishida Uryu, Hisagi Shuuhei, Shihoin Yoruichi  (Characters by Tite Kubo)
Warnings: None
Notes:

“Alright, we’re here to…er, Urahara-san, are you…staying?”

“You asked to hold a meeting in my store, Abarai-kun. An emergency meeting. Should I not be present?”

Comments

[license_points]

I didn't think it was too confusing. You mention names frequently enough that it's pretty clear who was talking the whole time.

[imladra]

Thank you very much for reading. :)

[hu3long2]

I would say that the middle was a little confusing as to who was speaking, and I agree that when you mentioned names it was pretty clear. Ishida was also pretty clear most of the time since he uses -san endings

[imladra]

Thank you. This is why I posted it only here so far. I'll work on it and see if I can't improve it.

I figured Ishida was easy to spot...so polite. Urahara and Yoruichi are harder to really distinguish.

I'm glad it is funny though, and thanks for the feedback! :) It's appreciated!

[hu3long2]

More hot air from me *turtle shell receding in the distance*

Yes, actually, there were a few lines where Urahara and Yoruichi were the most difficult to tell apart and I thought one was the other. Ichigo and Renji you mostly ID'd and I could tell from context. Hisagi was quite clear from context as well, and I think he didn't speak as much.

The section I found the funniest was the girls' requests section especially the Rukia/Momo requests, I think because there was so much content-- not letting Momo watch them spar etc. It was that linking of requests to events in their own lives which provided the fodder that was so funny. The top 10 list at the end was funny as well-- great display of male testosterone. I also feel Hisagi could be beat up more-- more pressure on him, him more resigned-- that might sharpen the 2nd half of the beginning.

I'm a slow thinker, so it takes a while for things to shake loose out of my brain... sorry for the spamming again!

[imladra]

I didn't think of it, but now that you mention it, I agree with your point about Hisagi. He should get more hell. Which would also give him more lines. I have him pegged as a pretty quiet guy, so he didn't speak up all that much here.

If you think of anything else, don't hesitate to tell me. :)

[xsethsownstarx]

Request List? OMG! LMAO! This just keeps getting better!

And I don't think it was confusing at all.

[imladra]

Thank you! Glad you like the requests...I had quite a time figuring out what everyone's favourite pairing would be. :) I think Soi Fon's is the funniest. :D

I have cleaned it up a bit, so you've read the new and improved version. I'm happy to hear it works!

[midnightbast]

I love reading these. lol I stop by here every so often just to see if another has been posted. :) <3

[imladra]

Well, thank you very much! I appreciate it, and I'm really glad you enjoy them. :)

[midnightbast]

I really enjoy all the fandoms you write in. I've read most of what you've posted in your fic list. ^^; I followed links for the Kurogane/Fay and got sucked in by the rest. XD

I really love how with the pirate set of stories you posted both PoVs. Really like seeing things that way. It's very unique in fandom writing. :)

[imladra]

Thanks! I'm really glad to hear that you like what I write. (Especially the pirate stuff...those are tough to write sometimes, but worth it. ^_^)

Hee hee...was it Bleach that sucked you in? Because I know that I personally read way too much Bleach. :D

[imladra]

I'm glad. :) Thanks!