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hjcallipygian

Of Those Chosen: The Twins - Chapter 18

Dec 01, 2004 15:50

Only one more chapter to go, and this is done.

What a crazy thought. I started this story before I started this Live Journal, even. It'll be strange not having The Twins as my big WIP, but I'll still have two more stories' worth of travels in this post-Chosen universe to keep me company. I'm really interested to see your reactions to both this ( Read more... )

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hjcallipygian December 1 2004, 14:59:27 UTC

I seem to remember Angel getting knocked out a couple of times in the course of his show, but I don't know if it was from being struck or from other things... why?

I'm glad you liked the chapter. =)

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hjcallipygian December 1 2004, 16:16:32 UTC

I would think that, technically speaking, one wouldn't be able to knock out a vampire. Concussions occur when the brain is knocked around inside the skull and swells, forcing the body to shut down (or so I believe; I'm no medical person, that's for certail -- midnightsjane, if you read this, is that about right?). I can't imagine that would work on a vamp... but I wouldn't think a tranq would, either.

Who knows. =) They feel pain, or else punches wouldn't work, so maybe I'm completely off.

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keith5by5 December 1 2004, 15:44:12 UTC

Plenty good fight scene, and heavy on the angst.

And Robin knows.

BOOM!

Great cliff-hanger.

hjcallipygian December 1 2004, 16:17:47 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Didn't much mean for it to be a cliff-hanger, but I suppose for a F/X 'shipper, it would totally be. =)

keith5by5 December 2 2004, 00:12:51 UTC

I just want to see what Robin does.

hjcallipygian December 2 2004, 07:06:53 UTC

You get to. The next chapter addresses the Faith/Robin relationship and where it goes.

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4thdixiechick December 1 2004, 18:14:33 UTC

great chapter!
I liked all of it, but for some reason this line stands out: Donner grinned. "All I ever see is the neck," he said, and attacked.

Cole really knows how to push Xander's buttons--the Angst!Xander at the end is not a pretty sight (although completely in character)

hjcallipygian December 1 2004, 21:16:24 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

"All I ever see is the neck," is one of my favorite lines in the chapter. I love that Faith/Donner interaction there -- I thought it up about two months ago and I've been so excited to get it into the story. =)

iyalode December 1 2004, 23:50:09 UTC

Everything I expected and more. Loved it.

So glad you kept Cole ...undead. He's a great OC. I hope if Cole and Xander meet in later years that Xander brings a lighter. Poetic justice and all that :)

hjcallipygian December 2 2004, 06:58:44 UTC

Thanks!

Yeah, Cole's just not done yet. Donner was, and the twins -- as the title of the story -- needed resolution in this story. But Cole... he still has a role to play.

I promise he never gets a soul. =)

liz_marcs December 3 2004, 08:17:59 UTC

I meant to comment on this earlier.

This is like watching a slow-motion car crash (in a good way, not like saying your writing is bad...not at all).

You can see everything fraying around the edges here of all the characters. The string actually started getting pulled with the earlier talk between Robin and Faith (his acceptance of a Slayer's relatively short lifespan and Faith being a little worried about that attitude).

Everything has been tugging at that string since then and you're seeing the cloth unravel.

Xander did his best and, the sad fact is, no one could have done better (unless they planned to slap chains on Katherine and lock her up). Because of circumstances out of his control, he failed. He'll be blaming himself and, worse, Robin will be holding him responsible for it ( ... )

liz_marcs December 3 2004, 08:24:28 UTC

Whoops! And I forgot the "Robin knows" part. Heh.

Why do we torture our favorite characters so?

hjcallipygian December 6 2004, 07:31:14 UTC

Was it believable that Robin figured it out then? I thought it was, but then, I'm the writer, so obviously I thought it was.

Why do we torture our favorite characters so?

Because they're our favorite characters because of how they respond to the torture. =)

hjcallipygian December 6 2004, 07:29:42 UTC

Sorry it took me so long to reply to this. I had to think about it all for a while, to be able to reply accurately without spoiling you any.

First off, thank you so much for the compliments. As you know, I'm a big fan of your writing, so it's very flattering.

Unless you're planning a sequel, I just don't see how you'll be able to finish this story before you go visit your sweetie for the holidays.

I'm actually planning two sequels. I'm a big believer in the three-act structure for writing. With just a cursory examination, you can look at The Twins and pick out the first act (introduction/setup), the event which leads to the second act (Cole witnesses Katharine declared a Slayer) which is the rising action, and then the event which is the climax (the fight over the past two chapters) and brings about the conclusion.

The three stories will also follow this structure, with each story serving (roughly, with perhaps some overlap) as an act.

This looks like it's going to get pretty ugly pretty quickly (oh, like it hasn't been getting ( ... )