Only one more chapter to go, and this is done.
What a crazy thought. I started this story before I started this Live Journal, even. It'll be strange not having The Twins as my big WIP, but I'll still have two more stories' worth of travels in this post-Chosen universe to keep me company. I'm really interested to see your reactions to both this
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Was impressed by how you made it believeable for Cole to escape... both Xander and Faith would care more about their fallen comrade than about ensuring the vampire dies... tho of course now there's gonna be a lot of pissed-off Slayers after him...
Can't wait to see how you finish this story... and what cliffhanger you leave us with before the next one.
Mike
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Anyway. =)
Thanks so much! I'm really glad you're still liking this. I figured you just got caught up in end-of-semester projects and that's why I hadn't heard from you in a while.
There is a reason the Scythe was less effective (after you commented on its conspicuous absence, I worked it into the existing storyline). It'll be hinted at in the final chapter, and confirmed as fact by the end of the second story.
One question that's been eating at me, though, is why did Cole do all this? ( ... )
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There is a poetic beauty in Katherine being the one to kill Audrey. Not to be morbidly romantic, but it does seem right that they should die together.
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Tense writing (as in your ability to maintain the tension throughout the fight). Somehow I thought one of the twins would make, but I guess you're not one for happy sappy endings. Not having read on yet, it's obvious Faith and Robin are done for, as well as his friendship with Xander, but I think Robin is mature enough (from his attitude during both the show and as portrayed in this story) not to hold a grudge against Xander. Well, not for long, anyway.
Here and there are a few typos and a couple of awkward sentences, e.g.
"Cole watched Katharine die from the shadows" (almost sounds like the shadows killed Katharine)
But otherwise excellent mechanics.
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Again, thank you so much for the feedback on this story. I've really enjoyed reading it.
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Great climax here, the action is well-written: not over or under detailed. Looking forward to the Robin/Faith/Xander explosion coming soon!
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Anyway, I loved it and am now off to re-read and catch up on The Dreamless.
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