Gorgeous [Part 3b/?]
anonymous
February 18 2010, 08:13:24 UTC
He counted up to eleven lashings before the number became obscure and the pain mingled with the masochistic pleasure it wrought. Alfred was thankful for the support that the suspended bar provided, for it was not long before his knees became jelloid and his legs beginning to collapse. He stopped himself before he could feel the pressure of the cuffs cutting into his wrists with the descent of his sagging body. He was a hero, and as such, he wouldn't - no, couldn't - allow himself to be defeated by a mere kink!
The moment that the lashings ceased, the American released a faint sigh. If it had gone on any longer, he probably would have given in - so totally not a heroic thing to do
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Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 15:42:18 UTC
The entire fic was pure and utter hotness and I loved how you wrote them! One small thing that really took me out of the mind melting hotness was that Arthur took him "dry". That, I mean, there's no way you can be taken dry and without prep without seriously tearing up the person receiving, not just nice pain but bad pain. Other than that the fic was amazing and I really enjoyed it!
Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 19:13:56 UTC
author!anon here;
I actually have to agree with you. Normally I prefer not to write 'dry' scenes as I'm aware the pain they actually do cause (unpleasant stuff, I can understand, yeowch), but it was about 3 am when I was finishing writing this...and my sleepy mind is apparently apt at deciding 'hey, lets add this in!'
Sorry for the discomfort, I'll do my best to keep an eye on my sleepy brain if I'm ever writing that late again. *gives a box o' chocolates* Thanks for reading and giving me that concrit! It was much appreciated. =)
Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 13 2010, 17:51:45 UTC
ARUGH. GUH. SO. FRIGGING. HOT. *rereads to remember every single damn detail in the fic*
Seriously, I loved this fill. And the characterisations are spot on. <3 I don't think I've read a hotter and more well-written BDSM fill, and it gave me so many kinks that I didn't know I had/liked. *cough*daddykink*cough*
Though, if you don't mind, I'd like to make the suggestion that perhaps you could makes some changes to the dry penetration part if you de-anon someday (please, please do. I want to read your other fics so much). It was the only thing that threw me off and momentarily pulled me out of this smooth-reading and well-written fic. I know that you know how much tissue damage there will be, so I'm just making the suggestion that maybe the change will make the fic even more believable for fans who like to imagine them at it. ^_~
Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 30 2010, 09:39:08 UTC
I would marry you if i could. *_* THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL...i usually don't care for the 'daddy' complex..but when it's with England and America it's just suuuuuper sexy <3<3<3 Your like SANTA! Blessing people with this oh so delicious story ;)
Author!Anon comes to collect souls and children!
anonymous
April 2 2010, 22:39:24 UTC
*jots this down* Alrighty then, I'll be back next tuesday to steal your soul through marriage, and I also believe someone (or a few people) promised me their first-born children. This week just keeps getting better!
The moment that the lashings ceased, the American released a faint sigh. If it had gone on any longer, he probably would have given in - so totally not a heroic thing to do ( ... )
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I actually have to agree with you. Normally I prefer not to write 'dry' scenes as I'm aware the pain they actually do cause (unpleasant stuff, I can understand, yeowch), but it was about 3 am when I was finishing writing this...and my sleepy mind is apparently apt at deciding 'hey, lets add this in!'
Sorry for the discomfort, I'll do my best to keep an eye on my sleepy brain if I'm ever writing that late again. *gives a box o' chocolates* Thanks for reading and giving me that concrit! It was much appreciated. =)
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Seriously, I loved this fill. And the characterisations are spot on. <3 I don't think I've read a hotter and more well-written BDSM fill, and it gave me so many kinks that I didn't know I had/liked. *cough*daddykink*cough*
Though, if you don't mind, I'd like to make the suggestion that perhaps you could makes some changes to the dry penetration part if you de-anon someday (please, please do. I want to read your other fics so much). It was the only thing that threw me off and momentarily pulled me out of this smooth-reading and well-written fic. I know that you know how much tissue damage there will be, so I'm just making the suggestion that maybe the change will make the fic even more believable for fans who like to imagine them at it. ^_~
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And that Alfred caved not because of the prospect of more spanking but no spanking... asdgflkj; I didn't even like spanking before this.
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THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL...i usually don't care for the 'daddy' complex..but when it's with England and America it's just suuuuuper sexy <3<3<3
Your like SANTA! Blessing people with this oh so delicious story ;)
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Alrighty then, I'll be back next tuesday to steal your soul through marriage, and I also believe someone (or a few people) promised me their first-born children. This week just keeps getting better!
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-dies-
also I do suggest listening to "King of the World" by Porcelain and the Tramps
it makes it even more delicous to read
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