New chapter, a-hoy!

Apr 24, 2007 08:59

Geez, I was going to wait until FFnet stopped being stupid and the alerts started working again, but I'm impaitent so screw alerts! I'm posting it!!
Uh... I feel like I made Naruto a little bit too A.D.D. and scatterbrained in this chapter, but oh well. Hopefully he's not TOO OOC.

Enjoy pretties! ♥

Title: What Would Jesus Do?
Rating: M / NC-17
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thepinkangel April 24 2007, 15:49:37 UTC

*in process of beta-ing!*

Um, I'm in class, but I started reading and checking it over. I dunno if you sent this to me yet, but I checked my email and didn't see anything that I didn't recognize.

I'll email you the beta-ed version, is that okay? :3 All edits will be bolded and underlined so that you can see them easily.

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 16:02:17 UTC
Ah that'd be perfect!
Uh.. I'm actually in class too, so hopefully I'll get it before it ends.

Thank you!!~~ ♥

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thepinkangel April 24 2007, 16:27:51 UTC

EET EES SENT.

Notes are in the email.

Oh, and by the way? I LOVED this chapter DDDDD: ♥♥♥ I had such a hard time not busting a gut in the middle of class XDDD;;;

Mahree mee und haff mah bebehs D: ♥

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 17:23:22 UTC
Y-you even went back and pasted in all the changed I made!! WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN ALL MY LIFE?! *showers you with love*

HEH HEH. >D Gewd, I'm glad you liked it!! <333 I felt like I made Naruto too moronic... but then I remembered it was Naruto so I guess that's okay. ♥

LOLK ♥♥ Or we could go straight to the honeymoon ohoho~

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shini_chii April 24 2007, 18:18:08 UTC
AGDAEIOANHOIGAENHOGANENAEG ♥.

I would LOVE if someone had the balls to ask me that fucking question.
But oh Shikamaru you smart-ass ILU <3.

I was about to punch something until the Gai and Lee scene. I was so srsly pissed off at the fucking woman and ASDF. I kept scrolling down to get past all the 'Uncle Gai!' 'Lee!' and giggling all the way I gotta stop shipping GaiLee that much DX;;;;. Manly tears, gotta love'em.

If Sasuke had a stick shoved up his ass, this guy had the rest of the tree up his.

ILU seriously <3. So much ♥.
Oh men, I have But I’m a Cheerleader! somewhere in my PC, (I... think) but I haven't seen the friggin' movie D:. *will try to see it now*.

And your Naruto is so perfect!! ♥_♥ he makes giggle like the Naruto in the manga (srsly, cyborgs? XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD, I cracked up with that).
*runs off to ff.net and tries to see if she can't leave another long review filled with undying love ♥*

I love how this thing keeps trying to make me replace 'Sasuke' with 'Sausage' LOL [/immature]

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thepinkangel April 24 2007, 18:27:02 UTC
Pfffft, I totally gotta draw that now XD ♥

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 18:45:58 UTC
OH NOES, WE HAVE KEYBOARD MASH!

I've been DYING to write Gai ever since I started writing fanfiction. XD Ohhh youthful comic relief~ the best of the best. I'M WITH YOU, GAILEE = WIN!!

Go watch it!! It's hilarious and depressing all at the same time. Plus it has hot lesiban action! ;D

Thank youuuu! I'm glad you like him, since I was worried he came off as waaay too A.D.D., but I guess he's like that in the manga too. XD Poor guy.
YOU SPOIL ME!! *loves the love* <3333♥

HAHAHA poor Sasoup. D:

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shini_chii April 24 2007, 18:59:16 UTC
YOU LIKE GAILEE TOO? AND HERE I WAS THINKING I COULDN'T LOVE YOU MORE ;O;!!!1!!!1!!

Gai-san is the most fucking hilarious thing to write. Ever.

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eruferu April 24 2007, 18:21:34 UTC
Damn, this so good! XD

LOVED IT, like always ♥

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 18:39:22 UTC
Just so you know, I was totally listening to your FST the whole time I wrote it. <3333

I'm glad!! Thank yew! :D

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dollhouse__x April 24 2007, 19:30:03 UTC
XDD OMG I'm on the schools computer right now so I got no time to read but I printed it out and that's gonna be my distract plan for Religion today 8DDD.(how ironic that I'm reading THIS in religion XDDD!)

I KNOW it's gonna be an excellent chapter so here's a GOOD JOB ON MAKING SEXY FICS in advance. ♥

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dollhouse__x April 24 2007, 21:46:36 UTC
8DD Thanks to this, my religion class wasn't as boring as it usually is. I had to like check myself so I don't look like a smiling MANIAC though XD;; It was so hard not to smile at the last scene. I was blushing too XDDD It was so sweet ♥♥

Religion Teacher: Suimu is there something entertaining that you'd like to share with the rest of your classmates?

Me: Errr D8 no. Sorry.

XD I always love reading your Narutos~ He's so cute ^^ I like how he just rambles off about random stuff to cheer Sasuke up :DD It's so cute. dkfdksjd

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 21:54:48 UTC
Lawls, I can only imagine what it would've been like if he forced you to read it aloud in the middle of your RELIGION class. XDD If only, if only.

Ahaha, my Naruto is so A.D.D., it's so much fun to write. <333 Thank you!!! I'm glad it's making you smile and you're enjoying it~

BTW- I can't stop staring at your Sasuke drawing. D8 *explodes from sexy**rains Bike confetti everywhere*

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dollhouse__x April 25 2007, 04:25:53 UTC
XD OMG If I had to do that I'd dieeee. My religion teacher would to >>

A.D.D NARUTO=WINN <3 Everyone needs a bit more of that I think 8DDD.

XD Gahh the only thing I see when I stare at my Sasugly drawing is the medicore job of leather pants. DDDD: *eats the confetti* Yum. More fuel for my drawing 8DD keep em coming, sister.

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transient_words April 24 2007, 19:50:45 UTC
Truthfully, it is a real treat to read this fic after having had a stressful and very unpleasant time with exams. This is was a wonderful chapter: I love the fact that the flow is good and it is easy to read. You describe things very well, without overdoing it or sounding too flowery (that’s something I and many other authors tend to be guilty of). As strange as it sounds, whilst reading your descriptions I have no difficult imaging the things in my head. The short paragraph with Sasuke reflecting on Itachi was a perfect example of this - it was wonderfully vivid and extremely well-written. Furthermore, you also describe physical reactions well ( ... )

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heeythatsmybike April 24 2007, 22:01:29 UTC
I'm happy to hear it was such an enjoyable read (especially since it was written when I was stressed/fried from preparing for finals)!!! I'm glad you're able to picture everything in your head since it's what I am for! I'm an artist through and through so I like to more-so think of writing as painting pictures with my words- so really it's the same craft, just a different medium. <3

I'm glad you think Naruto is spot-on since I was worried he was a bit all over the place in this chapter, especially since I was trying to cram all these different side of his character in there all at once (and you just named everything I was trying to show *GLEE*).

Ahh, I will forever love your well-thought out, eloquent, and insightful reviews. ♥ Thank you so much dear!!! *loves on you*

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