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Yuletide Potions XI

Dec 14, 2007 19:25

Title: Yuletide Potions
Team: Spy for the Order of the Phoenix
Word Count: 8 x 100
Rating: G
Challenges: Broken Memory Charm
Characters: Severus, Hermione, Wendell and Monica Wilkins/Granger

Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4, Part 5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8, Part 9, Part 10“Now, Monica. You agreed we’d hear her out,” Wendell said reproachfully ( Read more... )

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ginny_weasley31 December 15 2007, 00:36:21 UTC

Oooooo! I do like that. I do like how Wendell went to the direct question of Severus' intentions as soon as he learned about who he was and who Hermione was and WHAT she was. :D

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 00:58:55 UTC

Not to mention he's been reading letters from her about Severus for a while. He may not remember that she's his daughter, but he's still protective!

sshg316 December 15 2007, 00:43:36 UTC

*flails happily* OMG! These are fan-freakin'-tabulous! I really like what you've done here - the Granger's merely believed they had some sort of dementia. They've been very patient waiting for more info from Hermione, and I think her mum just had enough. I love how detailed Hermione was about Severus in her letters and that Severus took note. And oh, my dear Buzzy! The last line is a killer!

Lovely, lovely, LOVELY!

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:02:25 UTC

We seem to be developing a habit of throwing each other cliffies, so I had to end with something provocative.

With Monica, I was trying to imagine the bossy side of Hermione in that situation - knowing something is wrong and not having any way of figuring it out. The frustration level has to be really high. So she takes it out on her daughter, as mothers do.

I'm so glad you're enjoying all this, m'dear.

sbrande December 15 2007, 00:45:31 UTC

And the plot thickens.

Thank you so very much for this. It is great to see so many authors working together. I wonder what the next will do and how they will answer the question you left them with.

Love Sonia :)

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:03:41 UTC

Thickens and twists and where it goes, no one knows! I'm loving the surprise element of the round robin format.

misstee123 December 15 2007, 01:08:49 UTC

So do I!

Oh, wait a minute...I'm next...ummm, okay.

She left me a perfectly lovely set up, though, didn't she?

misstee123 December 15 2007, 01:10:21 UTC

This is great! I love this twist, with all the cards laid out on the table. Now, we just have to see how Severus responds to that question...

Lovely set!

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:15:39 UTC

Thanks. Yes, indeed. How will Severus respond, I wonder ... ;D

sunsethill December 15 2007, 01:20:03 UTC

Dueling icons! Obviously, I love yours.

I have been lurking over here for a while, but I had to chime in and say how much I loved the last line. I love how protective Wendell has been shown previously, and this will just prove to Severus that Hermione feels more for him than even she knows. And I'm so glad that things aren't getting worse--they just finally figured out what was wrong.

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:29:29 UTC

I love your icon as well - I had it in my rotation at one point. I love the idea of buttoned-up Severus having to deal with the idea that he's a sex symbol.

Yay for delurking! It's lovely to know that there are more readers out there; it's always a pleasure to hear from the quiet ones.

I like to think that Wendell has been feeling protective towards Hermione all along, without knowing why. Now, even without the memories, he has an explanation for those feelings, so he can act on them.

firefly124 December 15 2007, 01:17:29 UTC

Whew! So, not actual dementia, then. Just finally figuring out the extent of the Memory Charm. That's a relief! I love how you worked in the level of detail Hermione's letters have contained with regard to Severus, and how Wendell went straight to demanding his intentions towards his daughter. Yay!

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:32:30 UTC

I couldn't see how a memory charm could cause actual dementia. Maybe it's because I know too much about it - the plaques and tangles are very physical and take years to build before symptoms appear. Of course, this doesn't answer the question of whether the Memory Charm is reversible, that could still be a major problem.

Wendell is a protective father, in his own way. But also a supportive one. He's Hermione's dad, and therefore not a stupid man - do you really think he'd let slip how much she's been telling them about Severus by accident?

firefly124 December 15 2007, 01:44:52 UTC

Maybe it's because I know too much about it - the plaques and tangles are very physical and take years to build before symptoms appear.

Well, for Alzheimer's, but there are other kinds. But yeah, most likely it would look like some type of dementia to Muggles, but not really be.

Of course, this doesn't answer the question of whether the Memory Charm is reversible, that could still be a major problem.

Sadly so.

He's Hermione's dad, and therefore not a stupid man - do you really think he'd let slip how much she's been telling them about Severus by accident?

Not for a minute. *g*

a_bees_buzz December 15 2007, 01:50:20 UTC

most likely it would look like some type of dementia to Muggles, but not really be

Exactly. Which is why Monica is freaking about Alzheimer's (implying that she's known people with that horrible disease and knows exactly what it entails). Dementia is terrifying, but this is something different. At least, that's where I'm trying to take the story. My co-writers may decide otherwise.