Fic: Do I Dare Disturb the Universe? Chapter 17: An Overwhelming Question (part 1 of 2)

[frkmgnt1]

“…Streets that follow like a tedious argument
Of insidious intent
To lead you to an overwhelming question...
Oh, do not ask, “What is it?”
-T.S. Eliot, The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock

“There are horrors beyond life's edge that we do not suspect, and once in a while man's evil prying calls them just within our range.”
― H.P. Lovecraft, The Thing

Comments

In the end it was all about Lightning being too nice.

[amedamacherry]

I never expected Serah to be so reasonable! Given that she, other than Lightning, had a ton of time to think everything through and find the right words, of course what she says is more coherent than Lightnings part. But that's not all. Serahs logic about her only being able to get happy when Snow is really happy... brilliant! The way you put this conversation makes so much sense. And hell, you outline a grown-up and reasonable version of Serah that just can't be disliked. (Not even by me!) Well played

Re: In the end it was all about Lightning being too nice.

[frkmgnt1]

Thank you so much! It's both amazing to finally finish it, but also, difficult to let go after writing 50,000 words in two weeks. I have to get my head out of this story so I can move on to the other, so I'm working on a few of the outtake scenes that were cut out of the manuscript for one reason or another. (Mostly for length, but also, it just wasn't necessary to have more smut in Chapter 17 after the 25 pages of smut in Chapter 16.) I posted one outtake already, and it's 4500 words after editing (it was closer to 6500 before I chopped another section off to post separately

Re: In the end it was all about Lightning being too nice.

[amedamacherry]

Oh, I don't mind if you use the picture. Quite contrary, I appreciate the fact that you do use it! Technically, it's yours and you can use it wherever you want! :D
I'm glad you still like it! <3