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7 Deadly Sins - Gluttony by Mylodon

Oct 23, 2010 09:26

AUTHOR: mylodon
TITLE: Soft tack and a softer bed
SIN: Gluttony
RATING: PG 12
PAIRING: Archie and Horatio
WORD COUNT: 301
WARNINGS: None
DISCLAIMER: These characters are not mine, alas
SUMMARY: Shore leave is a time for indulgence

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challenge: seven deadly sins, rating: slash, character: archie kennedy, pairing: hornblower/kennedy, author: mylodon, fanworks: fanfiction, character: horatio hornblower

Comments 20

anteros_lmc October 22 2010, 22:51:19 UTC

Beautiful, lyrical, thoughtful and sensual .....

Tomorrow? The next day? When death does you both part?

....but with just an edge of what is to come.

This is real a gem. Thank you

mylodon October 23 2010, 07:53:10 UTC

Thank you; that edge takes the risk of over-saccharineness (new word, I has patent pending on it) away.

*mwah*

anteros_lmc October 23 2010, 11:27:36 UTC

In two hundred years time when some budding and diligent historical author is fretting over whether she can use the word "over-saccharineness" in her latest epic she will trace it back to this very fic and breath a sign of relief that it's not and anachronism after all ;)

charliecochrane October 23 2010, 11:36:12 UTC

We are history in the making!

eglantine_br October 22 2010, 23:35:33 UTC

Oh thank you for this. It is lovely. Good to think of them so happy.

mylodon October 23 2010, 07:51:44 UTC

*nods* Absolutely. These guys must have been so aware of the fragility of life and been determined to make the most of each day. (And night.)

sarlania October 23 2010, 00:45:30 UTC

Beautiful, warming little ficlet. :D And wonderful use of the prompt!!!!

mylodon October 23 2010, 07:50:40 UTC

Thanks, sweetie. I was really pleased with myself! (And am going to have to nicj several of the lines to re-use...)

shezzawatto October 23 2010, 10:30:45 UTC

Lyrical indeed!
door locked against the world and consciences locked against the Articles
Once again, you have the particular skill of "describing" physical love and making it hot without having to be explicit. Not that I don't love explicit from those who do it well, but I also like it that it's not the only way.
Love the paradox in the last 2 paras. Brilliant!
Thank you dear.

charliecochrane October 23 2010, 13:49:38 UTC

Thank you for reading and commenting so thoughtfully. I'm growing more and more pleased with this ficlet as I go along.

*hugs*

nodbear October 23 2010, 17:17:46 UTC

So you should be, pleased I mean - scones and cream ( albeit ready eaten and so offstage or in tum rather ) and then a lyrical and only faintly minatory hint that the first, last, everlastingness of the day is not that firmly guaranteed - great .

mylodon October 23 2010, 19:12:31 UTC

Thank you, my lovely girl. I don't think I intended the little hint at mortality, but it crept in none the less.

Being 'green' at the moment, chopping up and recycling this into bits of a Cambridge story. Waste not, want not.