Prompt 51 :: Train :: "Delay"

Feb 25, 2010 12:12

Title: Delay
Author: colonel_bastard
Series: Manga
Word Count: 500
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Kain Fuery
Summary: The memory fades but the impact remains.
Warnings: Mentions of suicide, spoilers through chapter 52.
Notes: I kept noticing how often Fuery seems to inexplicably burst into tears over the most mundane things. Especially in all the artwork ( Read more... )

colonel_bastard, prompt 51

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anat_astarte February 25 2010, 22:23:40 UTC
Wow, this is amazing!!

Absolutely stunning story!- this captures everything I love about Kain, his sweetness, his ability to deal with things with the same poise as his comrades, and his strong emotional sensitivity that can't always remain contained. Love it!

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colonel_bastard February 26 2010, 18:19:16 UTC
I'm so glad you enjoyed it so much! I've never written Fuery before, but I love the character (he's a total sweetie) and I'm happy to hear I did a good job with him. Thanks for your generous comments!

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ghostfriendly February 25 2010, 22:50:26 UTC
Very good idea, every little incident tells. Nice work.

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colonel_bastard February 26 2010, 18:21:20 UTC
Thanks very much. I had a little trouble with the word count, but I think in the end it did me a favor, keeping the piece short and precise. Glad you enjoyed it!

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chiharu_octavia February 26 2010, 01:47:39 UTC
Oh, man, that was nice. And you're very mean to Fuery. XD But the emotions were strong, it explained everything, and it made him a perfect fit in Roy's messed-up little group. Compelling.

I'm going to write a story about how Breda is the only one with no trauma anywhere in his background. >>;;

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colonel_bastard February 26 2010, 18:25:20 UTC
Surely you've realized by now that the more I love a character, the meaner I am to them. ^_^ Haha, love the observation about Roy's messed-up little group--- traumatic backgrounds necessary for membership!

And if Breda has no trauma... then why is he so terrified of dogs? *evil grin*

Thanks for reading and commenting, I'm glad you liked it. XD

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cornerofmadness February 26 2010, 03:01:57 UTC
poor poor Kain

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colonel_bastard February 26 2010, 18:26:28 UTC
I know, poor little guy! Thanks for reading and commenting.

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rika24 February 27 2010, 04:15:51 UTC
very nice. i've always felt sorry for Fuery, he's so sweet it's hard to believe he joined the military.

i like how you show that he can get through a tough event without a big reaction (which is very useful for a number of reasons) but later he feels the pain of the event.

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colonel_bastard March 1 2010, 01:07:36 UTC
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Fuery is such a gentle soul, I worry for him sometimes. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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