[Naruto] Syzygy -- Sasori/Deidara, PG (K+)

[finnimbrun]

Title: Syzygy
Genre: Character study, more than anything.
Characters: Sasori and Deidara; written with SasoDei in mind, though it could also be read as gen. Sasori-centric; splash of Dei.
Rating: PG (K+)
Warnings: It's Sasori's PoV, so there are some references to bodily unpleasantries. Kind of tried to keep this between the lines.
Word Count: ~

Comments

[anat_astarte]

I love how you’ve characterized Sasori. His thoughts are concise, seemingly disconnected or trying to disconnect from the emotions associated with the experiences that shaped him, even as and after he reinvents himself. Loved Sasori and Diedara’s conversation too. The associations they make between art and war are intriguing as well, very fitting for their characters, and perhaps that’s why they seem to understand each other in the end better than Sasori initially thought. Great fic!

[dayadhvam_triad]

Ohhh, nice. I like how you talk about the war "making" Sasori--as if ninja are not people but objects (puppets) taken to slaughter. :O

They are not lonely.
They are the loneliest people in the world.
I must say, those two were my favorite lines. ♥ It's just such a jarring contrast. It's as though--they're not "lonely," because there are other people who do not fit in, like them, but they are also lonely, because the people who do not fit in don't fit in differently from the others. (I hope that made sense.) And then you repeated it near the end! Their heaven, hell, and limbo all in one, because they are not lonely, and they are the loneliest people in the world.--and made me squee. :)

They are the world's orphans, war's orphans, still grotesque children playing with toys. Shunning society, desperate for its acknowledgment - for without acknowledgment as masterful criminals, they are merely freaks. War has made them. They must make war. Art. Without it, they have nothing.♥ I like the inversions of war making them and then they make

[hieronymousb]

Funny thing is, I always feel like I'd look really lame if people actually knew where I got fic ideas from. The whole idea about why Akatsuki actually come together = inspired from a chat with kalliel in which we were all blah blah blah, Akatsuki, and she was kind of like, "What I want to know is, where did Madara and Pein FIND these people? Not a one of them seems to care about their overarching goals. O_o" It kind of led me to thinking, which led me to conclude that it must just be because they're such misfits that nowhere else in the world would tolerate them. :P Which somehow led to SasoDei. Yeah, my mind works in mysterious ways.

Anyhow, I'm glad you liked. Your Sakura icon always fills me with glee. :D

[dayadhvam_triad]

Haha, I don't think that sounds lame at all. :) So long as the fics are good, fic ideas' origins shouldn't matter too much. (I mean, this is coming from the person who really wants to do a Naruto/Alice in Wonderland crossover. XDD) Good observation though; the Akatsuki members don't seem particularly inspired by their "goals" or anything, it's just that they catch the bijuu because well, what else is there to do? :P

Sakura is much love. :D

[eli_artemisia]

Okay, I'm going to just have to say "Ditto" to what dayadhvam_triad said in her comment. She seems to like the same portions of the fic I like and the same quotes for the same reasons.

I like Diedara explaining how war revealed to him what real art is and Sasori's thoughts on why he regards the "flash" as art.

The flash that took your parents. The flash that you've been trying your whole life to duplicate, and capture, because you were obsessed, and everything you do, you do hoping that someone, anyone, will give you attention. Recognition.

Interesting. OMG I read something with DD! *mems this as well*

Much Love,
Marysia

[kantayra]

Oh, wow. This is just beautiful! I loved it and, yeah, am pretty much incoherent. It was such an interesting look into Sasori's head, though, and I really like the way you wrote his interactions with Deidara. Very true to the characters.

[hieronymousb]

I'm glad you liked! Writing this kind of got me on a kick for SasoDei. I'll have to check out your story sometime, since I noticed you seem to have a nice plotty fic in progress. They do fit together nicely in a bitchy artist sort of way, don't they?

[kalliel]

They made him years ago, in Suna.

This was before he made himself.

I love the opening lines for this fic. I couldn't say why exactly, but they guaranteed my instant engagement in the fic, and are so very fitting for Sasori's character. (And in the literal sense, too. :P) I also liked the part after his parents are killed and while he's attempting to construct his puppets, he loses himself. The aftermath of that scene, where he decides that whatever that was, he will not feel it again was particularly powerful.

Frenzied artist he might be, but he sticks hard to his decisions and lives unerringly by his own personal authority; because that is control, and that is power, and that is all he's going to be able to create, in that mental space he's landed in. He can remake himself as he sees fit.

They do not come together because they care about Akatsuki's goals. They do not meet because they are interested in their leader's plans. None of them care. None are fooled into thinking the others do