The Great Write Meme

[findmeakor]

Ok, so I thought it would be fun to do a little informal critique on each other's fiction. The idea stemmed from blessed_beast's The Icon Truth Meme, for icon makers.

THE GREAT WRITE MEME- Comment with your username, and those willing shall reply with thoughts on any fiction, fandom or original, that you compose. That means it does not make a difference what

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[tabaqui]

tabaqui

[tabaqui]

Thank you!
I think that's the most...humbling thing to be told, really. That something i've written inspires. It's...boggling.

And Letters is my favorite thing to date. :)

[tabaqui]

Tabaqui! What can say about you that hasn't been said already? I love how you describe colors and scents in you stories, since I tend to see stories as a 'movie' in my mind while I'm reading, your stories add to that feeling, making me feel like I'm actually there in the story as a silent, invisible witness.

Even though I've drifted from the BtVS/AtS fandom in recent months, I know that, whenever I see a new story/chapter from you, I will read it.

Love ya, babes! :)

[tabaqui]

Yay!
*slowly drags you back in*
:)

I tend to see what i'm writing as a movie, as well, so... Neat!
Thank you!

[tabaqui]

I don't necessarily agree with the comments made earlier about your stylistic choices (use of dashes, italics, etc) as I don't see these as bad things, per se. This world would be very boring if everyone wrote exactly the same way and so I say carry on with whatever makes you comfortable. I've never felt that the flow of your stories has been disrupted by longer (and may I say, evocatively descriptive) passages.

I do have a comment, nevertheless, about No More Snakes And Ladders which I feel may not be what you wish to hear. When I first began reading this story I couldn't wait for the next updates and devoured them hungrily, but was surprised when the story took a turn that I certainly didn't expect. The story seemed to change from an enthralling insight into Spike and Xander's psyches and their burgeoning relationship to something slightly less satisfying. I think that the story is very good (although I'm a little dubious about the dice?douses?) yet I do feel that it possibly lost its way a little.

[tabaqui]

Well, issues that are mostly style are difficult to debate, since it's sort of a apples/oranges thing. But it's good to hear, because like i said, the dash thing *does* need watching.
:)

And thank you!

I'm glad you enjoyed NMSnL...did you finish it? I can't tell. I'm sorry if you felt that it 'lost it's way'... We mostly simply wanted to write their lives, what they were doing and how they were feeling... I hope you still enjoyed the adventures.

The dice were just for fun. Wee little monsters that weren't *really* monsters but...still kinda were.
:)

[tabaqui]

My only concrit?

You should write more Riley--and more Willow. Especially Riley/Willow. You could write a fic that takes place on a Hellmouth in Iowa, where they're raising their fine, strapping, red-haired, America-loving progeny.

And Andrew could be their nanny!
*squees*
*bounces*
*happily awaits the wunder-fic*

Really, the only thing I'd have you change about your fic is the fact that you end them so soon! Take "Snakes and Ladders"? There were only twenty-four parts!

What kinda catharsis is that? There coulda been at least forty-seven more parts!

More "Scaling Heaven"! More Ferrangel! Stop ending 'verses we love, you horrible, puppy-slaying monster!

You da man!

[tabaqui]

So Willow and Riley finally got married, leaving Sam to dwindle away in the South and Buffy to dance her heart out with the Immortal.

They moved back to lovely, corn-covered Iowa where a Hellmouth suddenly sprang up. Riley and Willow went to battle the emerging demons. Riley - trying to prove he was as good as Buffy - and Willow - trying to prove she didn't need magic - both were attacked and bitten by the horrible Snorgle demon. Ten minutes later their liquified insides were sucked out through a hundred Snorgle snouts and their dessicated corpses were trompled in the ensuing stampede when Faith, Robin and Dawn showed up to close the 'mouth down.

The end.

:)

*snuggles you*

Dude. If i kept writing i'd never do anything *new*!
Ferrangle! Heeeeeee!! Shouldn't that be Fangel?
*snerk*
*smooch*

Thank you!

[tabaqui]

You? Are astonishing. IMHO the standard bearer for S/X in particular and BtVS fic in general

[tabaqui]

*basks*
*wallows*
*revels*
Wow. Wowowowowowowowowowow.
Thank you so very much, that's...

Some damn amazing fb. Thank you!

I dearly love the boys, and want them to be *them* as much as possible, so it's so nice to hear this!
:)

[tabaqui]

I absolutely love "Little Runaway" and "Little Runaway 2." "Then the bed was shaking a little and Spike was shifting - was curling up behind him, tucking Xander up in his arms, chin on the crown of Xander's head and his body touching at every point down Xander's back." is one of my absolute favorite romantic lines around.

I also really liked "Under the Mountain," although I was surprised the first time around that they ended up together. Somehow the first couple of parts seemed like it was going in some other non-happy ending direction. I just love Spike calling Xander sweetheart.

[tabaqui]

Thank you so much!
I'm glad when older stuff can stand up to being read 'now' - i always see the places i need to edit! Heh.

I don't think i've ever written a 'sad' ending - i don't care for those kinds of stories, really, and tend to avoid them in rl and fandom. Even the couple of 'darker' things i've written have a good ending. If you squint and turn it a little sideways. Heh.

Thank you!