Pathfinder Campaign (2/?)

[elfhawk]

This next section took longer than expected, but at last it's done. Now to immediately get to yesterday's session.

Comments

[carmenwoods]

Glee!!

“I had best not see any light fingers,” Lorak said, leveling the woman with an even stare, lips curling to make his tusks even more pronounced.
(I think it should rather be "leveling an even stare at the woman", otherwise it reads like the stare knocked her flat.)

“Of course not, Ser Lorak,” she said, casting her eyes down. “I don’t know what I was thinking.”
(Ahaha. Sly witch is sly.)

Tumney North
(I like the name - is it a name for a district, then?)

The hook veered sharply upwards, as if it has hit something
(Tense disagreement. Also, does the hook fly through another window, or over the top of the wall entirely?)

If you had stood elsewhere, you might have ended up there,
(I'm a little confused at her meaning, here.)

The statue of the woman, on the other hand, had obviously had lovingly detailed attention paid to it.
(A mere nitpick, but every other sentence in this paragraph begins with "It".)“So left, right, or straight down the center?” Tilgu asked, peering around the octagonal room and taking in the four

[elfhawk]

(Ahaha. Sly witch is sly.)
He may or may not be buying the act.

Tumney North- is it a name for a district, then?
I was thinking more along the lines that Tumney was the street, but it crossed two bridges. Whatevs, I felt like a proper noun was required in these matters.

The hook veered sharply upwards, as if it has hit something
(Tense disagreement. Also, does the hook fly through another window, or over the top of the wall entirely?)
Typo, not tense disagreement. =P (The rope went through, up, then back over. Flying in 180 degree opposite direction! Possibly I misunderstood the wall. Meh.)

If you had stood elsewhere, you might have ended up there,
(I'm a little confused at her meaning, here.)
Probably so is everybody else and ignoring her. (Basically her logic was- if the hook is aimed to fall directly on him, he will then move and not be hit! But if the hook is not aimed directly at him and he moves, then he could be hit!)

The extra gates can be left out for simplicty, they're not important, but up-page a bit the statue

[carmenwoods]

Oh, no, then you understood the wall fine - I just didn't understand the descriptive sequence.

Fish poop isn't so bad, actually. It's the turtle poop that should really gross people out.

[pariahsdream]

Poop in general is not something most people want to discuss or thing about. But yay for story bits. :)

[carmenwoods]

Also, yay for coming up with a god of wealth! I'm sorry I forgot to say that earlier.

[elfhawk]

It's Greek. *shifty eyes*

[carmenwoods]

I'm just a rube.

[jachyra]

Now I'm babysitting Tilgu? That's gonna be fun to roleplay.

[elfhawk]

Babysitting is a strong term for it. After all, she's basically a grown woman. It's more like "hey, my friend from out of town is visiting and I'm a tax accountant and this is the first week of April and I literally have no time to spend with her, can you show her around instead?" With some grandmotherly guilt-tripping thrown in. And then, eventually, she will go away and no longer be your problem.

[jachyra]

With Lorak's overdeveloped sense of duty and utter refusal to be anything like his father I guarantee Tilgu will end up feeling smothered. I see random badger attacks on the hapless paladin whenever he pushes the witch too far. :D

[elfhawk]

You fail to account for her attack hair. She doesn't need to rely on her badger to defend her independence. =P But perhaps I misread her hex power. (But I am pretty certain it amounted to 'can choke a bitch without lifting a finger.' Though I do not think that's what the PfC designers intended it for.)