Spice - Chapter 15

[eimeo]

Title: Spice
Author: eimeo
Beta: penguin_attie
Universe/Series: TOS
Rating: NC-17
Relationship status: Pre-slash to slash
Chapter: 15/54
Pairings: Kirk/Spock
Additional Pairings: Kirk/Lori
Summary: It’s a question of biology. Vulcan biology.
The problem with falling in love with a member of an insanely private species is that it just might take you

Comments

Incomparable Phraseology

[elfqueen55]

His younger self would not have spent 31 minutes and 14 seconds of his morning routine sitting cross-legged on the deck and committing to memory the frequency of the engine’s hum as it skitters through the metal skeleton of the ship, he’s sure of that.

It's writing like this, this kind of style, elemetal, flawless, the kind of writing that draws you in, that keeps the reader's attention riveted and seared to the page: literary splendor, as I've noted before...

Can. Not. Put. This. Down! :D Your visual on Spock is so realistic...you've got me SEEING him, watching him, and waiting...ah, yes, the waiting...ad of course I'm loving the daylights out of Jim...he's waiting, too, and it's not the sort of thing he's known for...but this time it's different...this kind of waiting game is worth it...SO very worth it, and more...

Re: Incomparable Phraseology

[eimeo]

Wow - I've been sitting for hours with a big smile on my face every time I think about this fantastically kind comment, trying to work out how to respond! There has been happydancing. More than I should probably admit

Re: Incomparable Phraseology

[elfqueen55]

Realistic is exactly what you've rendered, and rendered it quit well! This is precisely why you're attracting so much wonderful attention to this story: it's all in the style...style is EVERYTHING for a lot of readers...no matter what the premise entails, it's the element of writing style that nails it every time! We NEED to "see" Spock the way we remember him, the way he was written in TOS, the way those screenwriters from so long ago envisioned his character and the way the directors guided Leonard Nimoy's performance...both he and Kirk must be "seen" by the readers...not every author can carry that off as well as you have here...its all rather extraordinary, and not only that,wholly addictive! :D As for analyzing the characters, well, of course! What else is the lure behind K/S? The characters as well as their relationship, the dynamics,the way they are with each other, the subtle cues, the non-verbal language they speak...for indeed they DO speak a very special language, the same language all persons so deeply involved with

Re: Incomparable Phraseology

[eimeo]

Thank you so much! I just love writing this fic, and it's WONDERFUL to get feedback like this!

And that's a fantastic way of putting it: "Spock IS life. Jim's life, beyond a shadow of any discernable doubt..." Another reviewer on the Archives was talking about the theme of home in this chapter and it got me thinking about how Jim is basically "home" for Spock. I guess it's another way of saying they are each other's life. I identify more closely with Spock, I suppose, so this idea of finding "home" in another person has a lot of resonance for me. But it comes to the same thing: they are two halves of one whole. *happy sigh*

[aldora89]

I literally squealed "yay, Spice!" out loud when I saw the chapter update on the K/S comm. Just thought you should know

[eimeo]

Yay!!! I do that too when a fic I'm reading updates (there may also be happydancing, depending on the fic...) and I can't tell you how exciting it is to think about someone doing that for "Spice!" YAY!!!

Thank you so much for this! It's great to know that all these things that I'm hoping to get across are actually coming across. I love writing Spock's POV; I identify more closely with him than I do with Jim, but he's also a real challenge to write. There's all these emotions swirling around, and he's not exactly connecting with them... "That's a level of showing and not telling that leaves me in awe" - THANK YOU so much for this!! The trouble with trying to show and not tell is that I'm never sure if I'm showing enough or too much or in the right way, or if any of it's reading the way it does in my head. Thank you again. I will try to oblige with the next chapter as quickly as possible!

[lil_insanity]

I've been reading this straight through from the prologue for hours... I just had to comment and say how badly my soul is crushed right now. ;_; The last few chapters have just been killing me!

[eimeo]

Ooooh I'm sorry for the soul-crushing! Yeah, I felt pretty bad, writing these ones. It's not nice to torture the boys.

I... kind of wish I could hand out cookies over the comments page. I feel like I should be handing out cookies...