Nothing Less Than Divine - Chapter 5

[bulma90_13]

TITLE: Nothing Less Than Divine - Chapter 5.

AUTHOR/ARTIST: bulma90_13.

RATING: NC-17.

PAIRINGS: John/Bobby, ???/Bobby.

CHAPTER SUMMARY: What does Elliot decide to do on his day off...

WARNINGS: Non-consensual, language, slash, crossover.

PREVIOUS CHAPTERS:

Prologue

Chapter 1

HAS BEEN EDITED TO FIT WITH CHAPTER 5!! Chapter 2

Chapter 3

Comments

[sj_snugglebug]

Oo! I love Wolverine/Logan. (= He's still got that grunty Grr.... appearance and I love it! Yayness. (=

[bulma90_13]

yes, i do too. he's the dad that bobby should have

[anonymous]

im a lurker here and ive read your stuff and its good but this chapter doesnt make sense. because elliot was there when john visited bobby at the hospital. so him being confused about john doesnt make sense.

[bulma90_13]

hmm....well, i'm glad you pointed that out because i hadn't noticed...i'll fix that right away, thanks!
(:

[bulma90_13]

but actually, after reading it over, he's shocked that john went to school with bobby, thats all. he wouldn't have expected a terrorist to have gone to school with a senator's son. does that make sense or not?

[anonymous]

hahaha i was gonna tell you to fix it exactly how you did. by having elliot say "i thought i recognized him." or something of the sort.

keep up the good work!

[bulma90_13]

oh jeez, everyone's pointing this out but i don't see how to change it...he's not shocked at the fact that they're friends, he's surprised they went to school at the same expensive mansion. does that make sense? if not, do you see a way to make it more clear, because i don't... :(

[bulma90_13]

oh, and for the terrorist part, he's all over the news...maybe i can get that in the story somehow...

[train_diskense]

Bad Rogue. No cookies for you. *thwaps her*

Liked this chapter.

[bulma90_13]

i hate her. and her southern accent, too.

[stranj100]

Psychic testimony probably wouldn't be admissable in court--depending on the judge.

[bulma90_13]

that made me laugh SOOOO hard.