SG1 writing exercise: Unlooked-for Gift
Unlooked-for Gift
Jack/Daniel, soft NC-17, 2700 words.
No beta; please tell me if I have spinach in my teeth.
Jack reached out to straighten the shoulders of Daniel's tac vest, fix a buckle. They were easy, familiar touches, the kind he could get away with in front of SG-6 and SG-15 there in the gate room, because he'd always touched Daniel like ( Read more... )
Jack/Daniel, soft NC-17, 2700 words.
No beta; please tell me if I have spinach in my teeth.
Jack reached out to straighten the shoulders of Daniel's tac vest, fix a buckle. They were easy, familiar touches, the kind he could get away with in front of SG-6 and SG-15 there in the gate room, because he'd always touched Daniel like ( Read more... )
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I like that they talk about what they like, what they want, AND they've laid down ground rules.
I got a kick out of you naming the other archeologist Dr. Levant. :D
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YES. Because sometimes it is actually okay to write slash about ADULTS. *smiles* Glad you appreciate.
I got a kick out of you naming the other archeologist Dr. Levant
*facepalm* OH GOD. See, my subconscious does this unintentional pun thing... I once wrote a fic about the Grand Canyon and named my OMC "Cliff." I DIDN'T REALIZE!
*blushes*
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Heee! I've done that "No WONDER he sounded familiar!" thing before myself. Next time anyone mentions this, just look cool and say "I wondered how many people would pick up on that." :)
I once wrote a fic about the Grand Canyon and named my OMC "Cliff." I DIDN'T REALIZE!
LOL!!!
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Ooo! Yes, that! That, right there, is what I love about these but hadn't been able to articulate. And the sex too, of course, but its being adult, self-aware sex is a huge part of what makes it so damned hot, and so astonishingly well written to boot.
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*distressed noise* I hope I don't sound like some kind of prat. It's not that- it's just that I'm very new in fandom and there's so much I *want* to do and I just wish I was *better* at it, you know? And I babble a lot. Really, I'm so in awe of you people who can write Actual Fic- 5k, 10k, 20k words- Good lord, I get 3k on a page, and it feels like I pulled multiple teeth. So I want to be better, that's all.
Anyway, I hope I don't sound like a prat because you say such nice things that I don't even know how to answer, but I'm very glad I made a friend in SG1 fandom and there will DEFINITELY be more.
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Obviously, I decided to risk the health of my router since you labeled it "soft" NC-17. A risk well taken, I must say. ;) (I think this router may just be up to more porn, though, as the story was still very, very hot! *g*)
Poor Jack! Surely there was a time when he didn't know how utterly frightening it could be to bear Daniel's absolute trust? I adore this jaded and wicked Daniel, with his iron-clad self control that he ignores in favor of giving in to his petulance.
I've hesitated mentioning it on that thread, lest it affect the direction of the story if she hasn't already thought of it, but I'm finding these characterizations very much in line with paian's running comment fic. Well, Hell of a Sight, actually, but they feel very much the same here (and isn't that a thing of beauty?!).
Hell of a Sight could work in after they return to Earth in the comment fic sooooo easily... but I'm greedy and don't think there can ever be enough of paian's fic in this world, SO THERE BETTER BE KISSING AND MAKING UP BACK HOME. *cough* Just in ( ... )
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*soft noise* Yes. This.
lest it affect the direction of the story if she hasn't already thought of it
Oh God, you are a better person than I. I am spamming all over that story, going "what about [X]?" and "we're going to see [X], right?" and just generally "I want I want I want!"
But, yes- My Jack is not quite as articulate or composed or self-aware as paian's, I think, but close. As for my Daniel... well, I would not be writing SG1 fic AT ALL if it weren't for her, and the vast majority of my Daniel is pulled straight out of her fic (the rest is from synecdochic) You should make sure to read her older fic, too, if the comment fic is all you've seen- Mechanisms of Restraint and In The Room, if you like Aliens Made Them, Still Life With Cliche if you can handle the angst, and EVERYTHING under the 'j/d lost city' tag.
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paian and synecdochic do situational awareness so well and I really love how you've climbed into to Jack's head, into Jack's situation, yet again. He really is the only one with half a prayer of keeping up with Daniel, in part because Jack is the only one Daniel trusts to do so, the only one Daniel trusts to set the boundaries that he needs to define himself with, to keep him tied to this mortal coil. I think Jack underestimates his importance to Daniel, even underestimates himself by extension, but he's where he needs to be in this wee universe and it's a glorious thing to behold.
Oh God, you are a better person than I.
No, no- I'm really not. I mentioned the greedy part, yes? I trust her to carry us back to Earth, but I haven't dared suggest a correlation for want of a variation! *rubs hands together maniacally in a not at all evil way*
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I have just recced you (again *g*) and friended you because you have hooked me on Jack/Daniel - which I had not thought about for some time...
*Hugs* Yay you!
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That's really a bitter-sweet situation for them with the whole not-having-sex-on-a-mission. But I'm sure Jack never waited so impatiently to get home. *bg*
Very nice and very hot!
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